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for The Viper's bite

by Malestorm

person WTLM
schedule September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
AWESOME CHAPTER!!!! Please continue with more PLEASE!!!
person Koala
schedule September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm completely captivated by this story. I hope there will be a new chapter soon! Might I make a small request? Could you please use proper spacing for paragraphs etc.? It would make the story easier to follow. I got a little lost a few times. But, all in all, this is an excellent story. I can't wait for more!!
person Verbatim
schedule September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Man Oh Man That was Marvelous and Hott More please post the next chapter soon.
person Edison
schedule September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I think I will have to steal Ky'an from you for a long while. HE and Aid'ian can hang out and talk. I LOVE THIS!!!!!!
person Parts
schedule September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ky'an is so damn sexy!!!! Oh how can Paula not want that. I guess he will have to make her want it. AWESOME chapter!!
person Allure
schedule September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was HOTT. Ky'an knows he is sexy don't he LOL MORE !!!!
person Anon
schedule September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please CONTINUE!! THIS IS AMAZING !!!
person shortest_warrior
schedule September 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ky'an is a fanny teaser. Get a girl all worked up then stop, does he know what that does to a girl?

I hope he kicks San'i's ass into the afterlife. Do not make a challenge to a Yautja when you're half, sorry fully pissed.

I think Ky'an could make anyone want him and I hope he keeps Paula. Keep goin' Blu I need more, pretty please, I'm down on my knees.
person Greyson
schedule September 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Perfection and beauty in every word I loved it!!1
person Payden
schedule September 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ky'an and Paula are SEXY And oh boy the things he could do to her MORE!!!!