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September 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ah! You must continue, what an evil place to end this part! Love this fic, you must go on!
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September 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
O_O And Jack Sparrow's eyes promptly pop out of his head at the sound of that last name...
CONTINUE PLEASE!!! Excellent chapter, great pacing, you definitely hook your audience. Don't be afraid to get more descriptive about where Norri is at and the other characters he's interacting with. Peter especially could be fleshed out some more. I was also desperate for more descriptions of Norri himself, he's clearly thinner, yet how else has he changed, is his hair longer now? What does he do when he is not *cough* on his back, what is his relationship with his pimp (aside the obvious and being his drug dealer)? after all most pimps have more then one whore, are there others like poor James. Ect. Stuff like that.
Either way I cant wait for the next chapter! ^_^
CONTINUE PLEASE!!! Excellent chapter, great pacing, you definitely hook your audience. Don't be afraid to get more descriptive about where Norri is at and the other characters he's interacting with. Peter especially could be fleshed out some more. I was also desperate for more descriptions of Norri himself, he's clearly thinner, yet how else has he changed, is his hair longer now? What does he do when he is not *cough* on his back, what is his relationship with his pimp (aside the obvious and being his drug dealer)? after all most pimps have more then one whore, are there others like poor James. Ect. Stuff like that.
Either way I cant wait for the next chapter! ^_^
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September 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Update!! Update!! You good writer, must know more!