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Nalani's Hawaiian? Didn't see that one coming, especially with the Red Hair. :)

Great chapter as usual, and thanks for the shout out for my comments. :)

Can't wait to read more. And I too wish I could visualize Nala's new outfits.

Wow, I love Nalas and Dhm'Nis connections, they are so cute together! But I think the other reviewers have forgotten that Nalas parents, who I cant remember the names of, were sent to Hawaii when they died and so she stayed with her uncle, who I again cant remember the name of, but she lived in Hawaii and was given a Hawaiian name. But with this latest chapter we learn even more about Nalas old life, BUT THE AUTHOR DID IT AGAIN AND SHE STOPPED THE CHAPTER RIGHT AT A REVEAL! It is so evil but so good! I am sure that the author will explain in her next update, she always explains things if something is confusing, but I thought I would just say because I remembered. Nala isn’t a blood Hawaiian, I think I remember it being said her father was Irish… I can’t remember, I just keep thinking about Nala and Dhm'Ni!!!!! I WANT THOSE TWO TOGETHER! Please…

How can Nalani be Hawai'ian and have red hair?
I've never seen a H. with red hair. o_o
A few typos.
But great job. I'm glad you put a little info on Nala's background.
I really wish I could see her armour.
And oh the scenes b/w her and Dom are so sweet. Wish there were more. :p

this is an awesome story so far!!!!!!! Please do keep going. Wonderful description!! I loved it! Can't wait for the next chapter. It this were a Predator book I would buy it! And it totally could be!

I simply wanted to echo my thoughts on this story which are pretty much identical to the ones I gave for "History"

Brilliance! :)

You've built up a solid array of characters each with their own identifying personalities and features. Nala is as strong a protagonist as Kella and her comrades are just as believable. I must say, I'm itching to see just who Nala will "hook up" with first. As you've proven with your other story, you can be quite unpredictable in that regard, though this time; there'll be no lousy 'Ooman' to ruin things. :D

Again, superb job, and I can't wait to read future installments.

I am really enjoying this story and look forward to the next installments. I only have one very minor quibble... the word "venerable" means honoured and respected. the word you need is "vulnerable".
I hope you will keep writing as I really do like your stories.

Kehlan

Hurray for Nala going to go on her first hunt. I hope it will be successfull.
I love the unique customs and information you slip in about the yautja. Some people don't really elaborate on their food, or their anatomy and such. It gives the story more originality.
I also enjoyed the dream scenes. Finally we get to learn more about Nala's past.
Can't wait to see what transpires between Nala and Dhm'ni next time in the... bedroom. Lol.
So many refreshing characters. Jabot got what he deserved, Nala told him not to say any more but he just had to open his big mouth. What an ass. He didn't even know her.
And what will happen when she's introduced to the rest of the clan? Hmmmm.
Some ass kicking will be due I'm sure. :p
"You act like you never seen an Ooman befo'"
lol. Happy Hallowe'en and Samhain. =)
I'll email you about the uh.. yautja wang. ;)
Is it hot in here or is it just me? Phewww.
-Cara

Yay! I love this fic. I want it to go on forever as well. I can't wait to see what happens next. I just love the way you write. :)

Well, I guess i should dust off the keyboard and get to date on reviews huh?

The last two chapters have been exceptional. Nala and D making up was perfect and the scavenger hunt was a unique idea.

That piece of c'jit Yautja with a rear for a mouth got what was coming to him. I don't think you could expect any different from any female, human or yautja.

Cant wait to see the next chapter the story realy kept me reading from early in the morning to 10:32 would have done more but no more chapters well keep up the good work.