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February 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Update. I love this story so much. Love the characters. Love everything about it. Please update soon.
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June 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Please come back Nala :(
I really miss this story and its characters. I've been following them for so long I'd just hate to see it end here without anything more, especially at such a pivotal moment. I really am hoping you'll come back one day and continue.
You're writing has always inspired me and I would be overjoyed to one day see your return. :)
Best wishes,
-DGD
I really miss this story and its characters. I've been following them for so long I'd just hate to see it end here without anything more, especially at such a pivotal moment. I really am hoping you'll come back one day and continue.
You're writing has always inspired me and I would be overjoyed to one day see your return. :)
Best wishes,
-DGD
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May 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
very good! edge of my seat. i would love it if this got put into a movie (with editing of course to graphic scenes). consider it? when will there be updates? i'm totally addicted.
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May 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hiya,
Just to let you know, this is a fantastic story so far! Could you please add some more chapters to it asap? I really wanna know if Nalani & Dhm'Ni mate or not.
Thanks
Jade
xxxxxx
Just to let you know, this is a fantastic story so far! Could you please add some more chapters to it asap? I really wanna know if Nalani & Dhm'Ni mate or not.
Thanks
Jade
xxxxxx
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May 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG You need to update like yesterday. I spent the entire day reading this i couldn't stop. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE Continue
Anxiously awaiting your next update
Anxiously awaiting your next update
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March 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
very very good-drools- can't wait for the next chap.
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March 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Writing Quicklist in case you don't get a steady beta! =D
Differences between:
"to" and "too"
"to" I am going to the store. I am sending this to my friend.
"too" It is too much money. There are too many of them.
"Presents" and "Presence"
Presents is for giving gifts or presents and presence is someone's presence, like them being there.
"sense" and "since"
sense, your senses and since like "Since you've last visited." "Since last year."
The Thers...
"There" as in "There they are." or "Over there." there is a place.
"They're" as in "They are" "They're going to the mall."
"Their" is possesion like "Their house is on fire." "There is their car."
and also..
"You're" is "You are" "You're going to work?"
"Your" as in "Is this your bag?" posession.
"S"
You put the uppy comma thing to show posession of something. like "Nala's bag" "Frank's clothes" "Fred's idea" "That guy's idea" "That girl's idea" "That man's stuff" and without a uppy comma thing is plurals. So when you put "Nalas" it's like there is more than one of her. "There are many birds" "The speakers are very loud."
Just in case:
"Than" and "Then"
"Than" "He has more than me." "He is bigger than me."
"Then" as in sequences of events. "First he will get on the bus then he will go home." "Then they will call."
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There's (also for "there is" I forgot that one) some other stuff but that's all I can think of right now. Well they're the most frequent.
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I'm sorry, I love your story a lot but the writing starts to get to me sometimes! Keep on doing great fics!
Differences between:
"to" and "too"
"to" I am going to the store. I am sending this to my friend.
"too" It is too much money. There are too many of them.
"Presents" and "Presence"
Presents is for giving gifts or presents and presence is someone's presence, like them being there.
"sense" and "since"
sense, your senses and since like "Since you've last visited." "Since last year."
The Thers...
"There" as in "There they are." or "Over there." there is a place.
"They're" as in "They are" "They're going to the mall."
"Their" is possesion like "Their house is on fire." "There is their car."
and also..
"You're" is "You are" "You're going to work?"
"Your" as in "Is this your bag?" posession.
"S"
You put the uppy comma thing to show posession of something. like "Nala's bag" "Frank's clothes" "Fred's idea" "That guy's idea" "That girl's idea" "That man's stuff" and without a uppy comma thing is plurals. So when you put "Nalas" it's like there is more than one of her. "There are many birds" "The speakers are very loud."
Just in case:
"Than" and "Then"
"Than" "He has more than me." "He is bigger than me."
"Then" as in sequences of events. "First he will get on the bus then he will go home." "Then they will call."
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There's (also for "there is" I forgot that one) some other stuff but that's all I can think of right now. Well they're the most frequent.
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I'm sorry, I love your story a lot but the writing starts to get to me sometimes! Keep on doing great fics!
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March 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am so amazed with the emotion of your story........ I need more!!!
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February 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness. This was just such a beautifully written and moving chapter, I'm still in awe. I'm always amazed at your incredible ability to "change the flow" of the story so many times in the space of a single chapter like this latest one. From the pain and despair of the beginning (and the end of the last chapter) to the hope and mystery in the middle (transformation) to the joy and happiness soon after (resurrection) and only for that to be snuffed out at the end just as quickly as it began.
Now, if I may interject here. I must say, your ability to "tease" the reader is truly second to none. I cannot even recall how many times during this story you had me going, thinking that something was finally going to happen, only to snatch it out of reach just at that critical moment before the point of no return. Now, I hope you do not think of this as a complaint. Far from it, it only serves to keep the reader coming back begging for more, as I will gladly do so. :D
Having been reading this story and following the characters for so long now and, it has come to the point where, anything from here on out will have such a more powerful impact than simply reading a story that can be done with in a day. It's like a TV show like LOST (for me anyway :)) where you become so engrossed with the characters over time anything that happens after a while becomes more meaningful. Such is definitely the case with this story for me. :)
Well, once again, Bravo my dear. I will once again continue to look forward to whatever the future may bring from you with this wonderful tale. ***applause***
Now, if I may interject here. I must say, your ability to "tease" the reader is truly second to none. I cannot even recall how many times during this story you had me going, thinking that something was finally going to happen, only to snatch it out of reach just at that critical moment before the point of no return. Now, I hope you do not think of this as a complaint. Far from it, it only serves to keep the reader coming back begging for more, as I will gladly do so. :D
Having been reading this story and following the characters for so long now and, it has come to the point where, anything from here on out will have such a more powerful impact than simply reading a story that can be done with in a day. It's like a TV show like LOST (for me anyway :)) where you become so engrossed with the characters over time anything that happens after a while becomes more meaningful. Such is definitely the case with this story for me. :)
Well, once again, Bravo my dear. I will once again continue to look forward to whatever the future may bring from you with this wonderful tale. ***applause***
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February 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yea what Death God Dist said.
This story has taken over my life!
I can't stop thinking about it Arrrgggg!!!
By the way do you still use your viper_shock@hotmail.com address?
Justin
This story has taken over my life!
I can't stop thinking about it Arrrgggg!!!
By the way do you still use your viper_shock@hotmail.com address?
Justin