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January 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Heh, that's the problem with spell checkers, they may give you a correctly spelled word, but not necessarily the right word. :)
But of course, I'm not that stringent about it, I cut Nalani a lot of slack because she tends to write very long chapters with lots of words (something I like), and that would be quite the headache to proofread.
As for the chapter, once again, you know how to leave us on a cliffhanger, it's definately a specialty of yours. Enjoying the 'love triangle' thing going on and I hope to see how that develops in the future. As usual, I'll be looking forward to what happens next.
But of course, I'm not that stringent about it, I cut Nalani a lot of slack because she tends to write very long chapters with lots of words (something I like), and that would be quite the headache to proofread.
As for the chapter, once again, you know how to leave us on a cliffhanger, it's definately a specialty of yours. Enjoying the 'love triangle' thing going on and I hope to see how that develops in the future. As usual, I'll be looking forward to what happens next.
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January 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nalani,
A MOST EXCELLENT CHAPTER - I was as nervous as hell waiting for the final outcome - what a cliffhanger !!!!!!!!!!!!
Not flaming here - but there are alot of spelling and grammar errors in this chapter that made it quite hard to read.
eg hairs should be heirs, every instead of everyone etc. I had to re read many sentences to make sense of them.
I am absolutley addicted to this story - I love all the twists and turns that happen to your wonderful characters and I am chomping at the bit to read what happens next - fantastic.
A MOST EXCELLENT CHAPTER - I was as nervous as hell waiting for the final outcome - what a cliffhanger !!!!!!!!!!!!
Not flaming here - but there are alot of spelling and grammar errors in this chapter that made it quite hard to read.
eg hairs should be heirs, every instead of everyone etc. I had to re read many sentences to make sense of them.
I am absolutley addicted to this story - I love all the twists and turns that happen to your wonderful characters and I am chomping at the bit to read what happens next - fantastic.
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January 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've waited so long for a udpated that I thought i would go crazy. love this story more soon please.
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January 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH NO YOU DIDN'T! =0
This is the great great grandfather of all cliffhangers. Grrr. I can't believe you did that. Writers are so evil. They think they have all the power =p
I can edit this chapter's spelling mistakes if you need someone to do it. Your spelling is atrocious missy but I'll let it slide just because you're such a talented writer. :)
Great progression with Dhm'ni and Nala's relationship. Soooo Die Oates wants Nala as a mate? And Dom was clearly jealous? This is good. I'm such a loser for being so wrapped up with your characters lol. But hey, they're so frickin real. The part where Nala was getting ready to teach Thr'ik patty-cake was hilarious. I actually pictured a yautja [especially a big male] doing it. XD
You've sufficiently let me hanging. I can't wait to see how the fight goes between Nala and the Elder!
[I thought an Elder, being wise and experienced, would be less prone to prejudice...so it surprised me when Ras or whoever objected]
I hope this story never ends, honestly!
This is the great great grandfather of all cliffhangers. Grrr. I can't believe you did that. Writers are so evil. They think they have all the power =p
I can edit this chapter's spelling mistakes if you need someone to do it. Your spelling is atrocious missy but I'll let it slide just because you're such a talented writer. :)
Great progression with Dhm'ni and Nala's relationship. Soooo Die Oates wants Nala as a mate? And Dom was clearly jealous? This is good. I'm such a loser for being so wrapped up with your characters lol. But hey, they're so frickin real. The part where Nala was getting ready to teach Thr'ik patty-cake was hilarious. I actually pictured a yautja [especially a big male] doing it. XD
You've sufficiently let me hanging. I can't wait to see how the fight goes between Nala and the Elder!
[I thought an Elder, being wise and experienced, would be less prone to prejudice...so it surprised me when Ras or whoever objected]
I hope this story never ends, honestly!
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January 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is a really really good story im not kidding. i wasnt really into predator stories until i started reading this one! i cant wait for the next chapter!
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like this story and I have been reading as you post. I say that to say post again
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January 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Another excellent chapter - cool.
I love you story sp muuch - I love the witty repartee between your characters,
I love you vivid discription of her monthly courses - so much fun to see a male upset about her pain.
I love you story sp muuch - I love the witty repartee between your characters,
I love you vivid discription of her monthly courses - so much fun to see a male upset about her pain.
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
MERRY BELATED CHRISTMAS AND SUCH. And Happy New Years Eve!!
I hope it's a good one. :)
Was so excited to see you had updated both of your stories. You're really on top of your game, huh? :p
Awesome chapter. I just love the scenes between Dom and Nalani. This is the best story in the Predator section by far [Human Hunter 1 and 2 were my favourite but they're done now].
I've already given my criticism on the grammar so for this review there's nothing I can suggest or think of that you could change. I really really love this story. I hope the Elders will accept Nala, but then again I never know what you have up your sleeve! Whatever happens I'm still going to devour this story like cake lol.
Best wishes for 2007,
Cara
I hope it's a good one. :)
Was so excited to see you had updated both of your stories. You're really on top of your game, huh? :p
Awesome chapter. I just love the scenes between Dom and Nalani. This is the best story in the Predator section by far [Human Hunter 1 and 2 were my favourite but they're done now].
I've already given my criticism on the grammar so for this review there's nothing I can suggest or think of that you could change. I really really love this story. I hope the Elders will accept Nala, but then again I never know what you have up your sleeve! Whatever happens I'm still going to devour this story like cake lol.
Best wishes for 2007,
Cara
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, what a treat, both of your stories updated one day after another. A nice way to bring in the New Year indeed. :)
Wow, some really great scenes in this one, and the writing continues to be top notch. The continuing complicated relationship between Dhm'Ni and Nala just keeps going. Dyne getting beat down was awesome, and Th'rik getting his ass handed to him (literaly) was also priceless.
Your descriptive writing really came through at the end though, with Nala's "uber-period" :D, you got a real sense of the pain she was going through. Can't wait for next chapter as usual, and seeing how the Elders and Patriarch greet Nala.
Wow, some really great scenes in this one, and the writing continues to be top notch. The continuing complicated relationship between Dhm'Ni and Nala just keeps going. Dyne getting beat down was awesome, and Th'rik getting his ass handed to him (literaly) was also priceless.
Your descriptive writing really came through at the end though, with Nala's "uber-period" :D, you got a real sense of the pain she was going through. Can't wait for next chapter as usual, and seeing how the Elders and Patriarch greet Nala.
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I enjoy this story. Even though I was away for a while I could get right back into it with ease. So all that is left is for you to bring ont he next chapter Pronto ( or when you can)