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Well that was unsatisfying.
:(
No Ooman sex. >_>
Lol.
Interesting, the part about religion and Paya.
So there's Paya the female counterpart and Cetanu, the male?
Just like in Wicca.
So did the Yautja create the humans..?

And christo Kella haven't you heard of a vibrator?
Poor Aja. Typical male though, he got off anyway lol.
So now he knows she wants him...
Update soon please!!
-Cara

^^ Kella and Aja are wonderful characters. Your plot line is delicious, and your descriptions are good. There are a few quirks, though, that are a little distracting when you read it. Stick to one tense! Don't go from "Kella pours orange juice" to "Kella walked down the hall" or something like that. ^^ It's a small mistake, so just keep consistent. Remember when you write your chapters, ask yourself "is this in past or present tense?".
Other than that SMALL problem, this is a top-ranking fanfiction. I love your characters and this story, and I can't wait for more! Have a wonderful day!

This story rocks!!! You must continue. I just love how he just pulled her "pigtail". That was great! I'm really looking forward to reading what will happen next. Keep up the excellent work, and PLEASE update soon!!

Yes, yes. I'm late. I know. But I have a good excuse. My muse woke up and she has been pushing me right along. I'll have a new chapter soon. YAY!!!!

Anyway. This was great. I always look forward to your updates. Despite your disclaimer I think your Yautja hold very closely to the accepted culture and with your own twists they become very believable characters.

I love this story man you are a good writer hey i wanna khow do you also think the ripple of a stone should never end your way to talented to let that story end god your a good writer.^_^

Oh I think it was excellent! I can't wait until the steamy chapter, it will be interesting to see how Kella will react to Aja's advances. Quick question though I was a bit confused by when she said: “I didn’t want your life on my back.” Kella almost whispers. “And I didn’t want to kill you because of what you did to me.” Wouldn't she want to hurt someone who wanted to hurt her? I just wasn't sure what she meant by her statement.
Looking forward to more!!

Hey, I'm loving this just as much as Ripple.....

Looking forward to future chapters in both - all I'll have to do as an avid reader - is keep the stories straight in my head LOL!!!

Why do you even ask :) Loved it of course.

I really enjoyed this chapter and can't wait to find out what happens next. Cara is right though, don't rush the sex scenes, they will happen when the time is right. I find with strong characters they tend to take on a life of their own and write themselves - don't worry, they will know when they are ready to jump in to bed (I hope its soon though)

HAHAHAHA! That was soo cute. I thought it was perfect. I can wait for the steamyness, as long as the rest of the story is interesting. And this one is. And don't forget to update "Ripple of Stone". You promised that you would not drop one for the other! Can't wait for more. :)