rate_review Reviews

Continuity error corrected thanks for pointing it out!! :D

And yeah Hellion is an ass lol

I dont know if anyone has already told you this, and forgive me if they have, but I noticed a continuity problem. If the man is an albino, then he would not get tanned. Albinos lack pigment, which is the thing that allows you to become tanned in the first place. He would however, get very burnt repeatedly.

Just thought you could change this or not. It is your story.


BTW, he is an ass for tossing the babies overboard becasue they dont have penises. F*cker.

I've read the sequel already, so that may color my views on Oria's Tale just a bit. However, I read this story in one sitting over the weeking and I was thoroughly captivated by the story you told. I can't say that I like, or even completely understand Oria, but she is a very interesting character. I don't believe anyone could live through her childhood without losing their minds...and obviously Oria hasn't. You also did a great job of incorporating Davy Jones into your tale.

I like this story, it really sucked me in.

Oria's family was very brutal. How could they just chuck babies over the side of the ship? Terrible, I wonder if that was actually true back in the day.

Anyway, great storytelling.

On to part 3!!!