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WOo-Hoo, now that's how it should have gone.
Actually, my favorite would def be Jack AND William with Elizabeth! Oh yeah!

very sweet, i liked it.

I enjoyed this fic quite a lot. You did something in this fic that I've wanted a writer to do for some time, but no writer did it until you. What is that you may ask? You had Jack take Lizzie for the first time in her bed in the governor's mansion at Port Royale. In all the other fics that I've read, the consummation of their relationship always happens on the island where they were stranded by Barbossa, or It happens in Jack's cabin on the Pearl. It never happens in that big four poster bed in the mansion, and I've had visions of Lizzie losing her virginity there ever since I saw the scene with Lizzie and her maid in the Curse of the Black Pearl. It's the scene where Lizzie's maid questions her about being "frightened by that pirate...It must have been terrifying" to which Lizzie replies in a quite dreamy voice "Yes, terrifying". HMPH!!!! The dear Miss. Swann isn't terrified of nor is she all that angry with said pirate (even though she pretended to be on the docks when he held her hostage). What she is though is intrigued by said pirate, and that is a short hop to falling in love with said pirate. Anyway, you made my day by having their first sexual encounter happen in her bedroom rather than the other two more obvious places. Thank you for fullfilling a fanfiction fantasy for me.

This is great. I love how you seem to following the story line of the film but twisting it without losing the integrity or story line of the film. lol did that make any sense at all?

WOW!!! This one is absolutely awesome!!

Very well written, hope there will be more chapters to come!

Fricken Amazing!

Excellent story...I love her father banging on the door!!!LOL

Very nice. I like stories that are based on the first movie, esp this part of it. Please continue. :-)