rate_review Reviews

i like it but i thought there were other couples mentioned. so plzzz update soon it's a good plot. and its funny to read about lois getting ragged on

well i really like the idea of this story it is well thought out and is progressing nicely. i think you should work on your grammar though, there are a lot of mistakes that can be easily fixed that would make the story seem more polished. I also think maybe you could stop stating the obvious. as a friend of mine once said "show the reader what's happening, don't just tell them" it adds more interest to the story. over all though i am curious as to what happens next and who gets pregnant and how. superman himself is nicely in character but richard seems much more aggressive than normal, granted, that can easily be explained by what happened to him but lois lane has been bashed to death already. making the main female character into the bad guy has been done so much it gets tedious. i can't wait to see how jason and now halle factor into the story though......keep up the good work!