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for In The Nick Of Time

by LaurenGraceJurious

schedule February 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
...hmmph. It's not like they actually built sandcastles.
And that was great!! Man, Lizzie has an imagination. And I can picture Jack after what she did, just staring up at the sky, his face blank. I'd begin to worry about him!!
schedule February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*sigh*
That was perfect, and realistic. I loved it.

*sigh* ... my brain has turned off, that was just romantic...
schedule February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
After reading that i need a nap! BRAVO!!! Standing ovation even!!!*bows down in the 'we are not worthy style'* AMAZING!!!
schedule February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh god. And that was just foreplay? ... I can’t even imagine what the actual sex will be like... Truly fucking amazing I’m sure!
person heartJD
schedule February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*bows*
You're the master.
I think I'm just gonna climax with Lizzie in chap.13.
schedule February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You are CRUEL! How can you stop there? ARGH!

Btw, a bit of concrit... I never noticed this before, but after watching CotBP again tonight, then reading this update... you seem to use a lot more "ye's", "be's" and "if'ns" than CanonJack. In fact, I never heard him once said "if'n", and "ye" and "be" ('I be this', 'that be that', etc) was almost just as scarce, but they were there.

I don't know. Maybe I'm just having a bad day or something. I still love this story. I still can't believe you ended it where you did, either. Update NOW. Please. :)
schedule February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, Jack, fuck her!! What are you waiting for?!

I can't wait until the next chapter!!!
person rejerito
schedule February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
HOW DARE YOU STOP NOW????!?!?!??!?!?!?!!!!!!! YOU EVIL WOMAN!!!!!!
OMG!!! I don't think I can handle the rest of the wedding night! My brain is already in non-functional state!!
IT'S YOUR OBLIGATION TO END OUR AGONY!!!!
We want THE ACT!!!!!
schedule February 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE TELL ME IM NOT MISSING CHAPTER 13 YOU COULDN'T HAVE POSSIBLY STOPPED THERE!!!!!!!!!
ACKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK *thud*
sometime later....
Ok...breathing has returned to a steady rate and im pretty sure i can see straight too. Thats a good sign. Now to try walking again. Baby steps...baby steps.



person Ziva
schedule January 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was a great wedding! Absolutely unconventional, but perfect. I never thought that a wedding could be so much fun. Jacks vow was so sweet (in the second attempt ;)).