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You STOPPED! Of all the dirty--*sigh* that was so wrong. >_< shame on you! lol, that was a good story, even if you did end it at a very crucial part. I forgive you. ^_^

YAY MY FAVORITE CHARACTER IS GETTING SOME FINALY!

I love it, love it, love it. All I can say is can I bath him next.

oh wow! that was fantastic, I absolutely loved it. Please , please please write more, you can't possibly leave it there!!!!!

Hmm, well you asked to be shredded.... Yes there are a few typos but noting major and nothing that spoils the flow of the story. (Your biggest gramatical mistake was the bit when Mercedes goes almost under the water.)

Other that that, you made one enormous mistake - you STOPPED WRITING IT.

Well done.

Kehlan

Oooh this was great.
I agree with Kehlan I wish you hadn't ended it there. Would have been nice to have a lemon, I mean after all the waiting we're doing it's only fair. :p
I like how it was done in Bthm's POV, though a little insight into what Mercedes was feeling and thinking would have helped.
And choler should be collar.

Wow! That was absolutely amazing! I was kind of hoping there'd be a little more than just Aja and Kella (not that I don't love them, Nalani, b/c I do). And Bthm and Mercedes, whoa. I'm glad someone suggested it; I was halfway thinking about suggesting it myself. ;) Way to go, Nalani.

BTW wish there was more.