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March 14, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Please update this. It is an amazing story that I would love to see finished
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May 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Write more..... I need MORE.......
Seriously though, I loved the story thus far. Amazing plot, truly indescribable characters, nearly perfect story detail, and the main character.....need I say more! Please continue writing this story, I really can't wait to see what happens next.
Cycho
Seriously though, I loved the story thus far. Amazing plot, truly indescribable characters, nearly perfect story detail, and the main character.....need I say more! Please continue writing this story, I really can't wait to see what happens next.
Cycho
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January 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMFG I LOVE IT! I WANT TO READ MORE! UPDATE SOON!!!! I love dusck and midniteblue they sound so cute!
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January 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's been a while since I read this on ff.net. It's still as good as ever and I still tear up when we find out that Kainde dies.
Could it's appearance hear mean that a Chapter 17 will be joining it soon?
Could it's appearance hear mean that a Chapter 17 will be joining it soon?
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January 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I made it to the end today. I love the story. Please be working on more as we speak, cause you have me hooked.
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, this is certainly different. I like it very much and look forward to reading further installments.
By the way, I haven't seen your name here before so if you are a new writer here, then welcome!
Kehlan
By the way, I haven't seen your name here before so if you are a new writer here, then welcome!
Kehlan
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Welcome to the Predaor section.
Very good. It's another different spin on Predator stories.
My only complaint, and it's nothing big, is that you should've kept your readers in suspense by posting your chapters one by one instead of all at once. Something to remember for next story (hoping there will be another story).
Very good. It's another different spin on Predator stories.
My only complaint, and it's nothing big, is that you should've kept your readers in suspense by posting your chapters one by one instead of all at once. Something to remember for next story (hoping there will be another story).
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ah! I can't believe I didn't notice the other chapters sitting there waiting for me...I Read the first chapter a I already said and loved it. Excuse me while I now go and lose myself in the rest of this story... will comment again when I surface after finishing it.
Kehlan
Kehlan
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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I rather like the fact you post all at once. I like logging onto AFF and enjoying a good and regularly updated story instead of begging you to grind them out. As for the story: I like the fact you have a lot of inner dialogue for the main character, I’d like to see a little more for the others. Also, there seems to be a couple of uncessary bits here and there that frankly, just don't wash well. All in all, I think this is great and I look forward to seeing where all the pieces fall. Please, please continue.
Now that I have reviewed, I demand my cyber cookies now.
Now that I have reviewed, I demand my cyber cookies now.