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May 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Dear b9696,
You know, I really couldn't take your criticism (or rather your berating) seriously. In fact, it made me laugh. How does someone, whose knowledge of literacy being so pathetically limited, feel as though he has the right to tell ME that my story is lame? Or as you put it, "lameass". When did ‘lame’ and ‘ass’ become one whole word? Your spelling and grammar suck. I can see that you skipped class to review my story.
Tell you what; I'll give you an English lesson, free of charge. Here's how you should have written your nasty words to me:
"This is gay and routine, do something to make it different or give up. Every other story is the reluctant couple. He's admired her from afar until finally he sees her in a different light and then they play these fucking romantic games. They are Predators for Christ's sake not some lame ass on Lifetime."
Did you notice the corrections? Don’t feel bad if you didn’t. I'm sure this knowledge is a bit eccentric for your insignificant peon-like brain to absorb, but perhaps you can take it in strides.
And as far as your "They are Predators for Christ's sake" comment, you would have realized, had you read them, that in the comics (like any other Predator fan would), the stories are based around love, compassion, friendship, family, and most of all, honor; Which is a quality you obviously don’t hold to at all.
How dare you go around tearing people’s work and confidence down so easily? I bet that little insult just warmed you right up inside, didn’t it? I bet you’re one of those people who feel as though they’ve actually accomplished something by doing this at the end of the day.
Next time you try to put me or my work down, make sure a spelling guide and dictionary are close at hand.
You know, I really couldn't take your criticism (or rather your berating) seriously. In fact, it made me laugh. How does someone, whose knowledge of literacy being so pathetically limited, feel as though he has the right to tell ME that my story is lame? Or as you put it, "lameass". When did ‘lame’ and ‘ass’ become one whole word? Your spelling and grammar suck. I can see that you skipped class to review my story.
Tell you what; I'll give you an English lesson, free of charge. Here's how you should have written your nasty words to me:
"This is gay and routine, do something to make it different or give up. Every other story is the reluctant couple. He's admired her from afar until finally he sees her in a different light and then they play these fucking romantic games. They are Predators for Christ's sake not some lame ass on Lifetime."
Did you notice the corrections? Don’t feel bad if you didn’t. I'm sure this knowledge is a bit eccentric for your insignificant peon-like brain to absorb, but perhaps you can take it in strides.
And as far as your "They are Predators for Christ's sake" comment, you would have realized, had you read them, that in the comics (like any other Predator fan would), the stories are based around love, compassion, friendship, family, and most of all, honor; Which is a quality you obviously don’t hold to at all.
How dare you go around tearing people’s work and confidence down so easily? I bet that little insult just warmed you right up inside, didn’t it? I bet you’re one of those people who feel as though they’ve actually accomplished something by doing this at the end of the day.
Next time you try to put me or my work down, make sure a spelling guide and dictionary are close at hand.
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May 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Don't get bent out of shape by Baxter, the fact that he just had to return shows how patheticaly weak he is. :)
Your story is enjoyed by the people who matter, that is all. :)
Your story is enjoyed by the people who matter, that is all. :)
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May 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is gay and routine, do something to make it diffrent or give up. every other story is the reluctant cople. hes admired her fromafar until finally he sees her in a diffrent light and then they play these fucking romantic games.they are predators for chhrists sake not some lameass on lifetime
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May 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
To the Above Review Posted by: b9696 2007-05-16 id # 3000023895
"this is gay and routine, do something to make it diffrent or give up. every other story is the reluctant cople. hes admired her fromafar until finally he sees her in a diffrent light and then they play these fucking romantic games.they are predators for chhrists sake not some lameass on lifetime"
Dear Sir,
I think it is very apparent that you knowledge of the literary arts is seriously lacking. This is a very well written story that while it's center is based around a romantic situation between two peoples who are very much opposites, it is also surrounded by lush unique environments, great fight scenes and high emotional confrontations. I for one, greatly enjoy the way Zellezra artistically executes her story. She brings forth an emotionally powerful love story, backed by a series of fight scenes that rival some of today's movies.
You seem to think that this story is a series of predicable events laid out before a group of prepubescent emotionally challenged idiots like yourself. For someone who by all obvious accounts can't even formulate a complete sentence, I leave you with this last resounding statement and advice. Stick to crayons and construction paper for your words of encouragement. Because in this place of intelligent and educated beings, you have no place. Well except maybe as the mutt out back locked in a leaking doghouse surrounded by your own sorrows for your lack of literary skills and up to your ankles in your own shit. Good day to you b9696, enjoy your limited days here at Adult Fan Fiction, because as soon as they realize that your nothing more then a snot nose child looking for nothing more then a paragraph to self stimulate yourself, your account will be terminated and your small insufficient life as critic and a review will have ended. Leaving nothing left for you to leave your words of discouragement on but the tiny coloring books that you so desperately cling too.
Sincerely,
Lord Zain
"this is gay and routine, do something to make it diffrent or give up. every other story is the reluctant cople. hes admired her fromafar until finally he sees her in a diffrent light and then they play these fucking romantic games.they are predators for chhrists sake not some lameass on lifetime"
Dear Sir,
I think it is very apparent that you knowledge of the literary arts is seriously lacking. This is a very well written story that while it's center is based around a romantic situation between two peoples who are very much opposites, it is also surrounded by lush unique environments, great fight scenes and high emotional confrontations. I for one, greatly enjoy the way Zellezra artistically executes her story. She brings forth an emotionally powerful love story, backed by a series of fight scenes that rival some of today's movies.
You seem to think that this story is a series of predicable events laid out before a group of prepubescent emotionally challenged idiots like yourself. For someone who by all obvious accounts can't even formulate a complete sentence, I leave you with this last resounding statement and advice. Stick to crayons and construction paper for your words of encouragement. Because in this place of intelligent and educated beings, you have no place. Well except maybe as the mutt out back locked in a leaking doghouse surrounded by your own sorrows for your lack of literary skills and up to your ankles in your own shit. Good day to you b9696, enjoy your limited days here at Adult Fan Fiction, because as soon as they realize that your nothing more then a snot nose child looking for nothing more then a paragraph to self stimulate yourself, your account will be terminated and your small insufficient life as critic and a review will have ended. Leaving nothing left for you to leave your words of discouragement on but the tiny coloring books that you so desperately cling too.
Sincerely,
Lord Zain
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May 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi Zellezra. Thank you for the review. I'm going to be doing some revamping on the story. It needs to be refined. So keep checking back for the new stuff. I love this story. I hope you will able to start a new story here on AFF. All of the writer's here are such an inspiration. Have a purrrfect day ,,,=^..^=,,,
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May 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow...impressive action scenes, Zel, hun. Such challenges put forth for our heroine and hero. And in the end, the bad blood received his comeuppance. Well done on the defeat, and can't wait for the next chapter.
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May 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay Anthea. That'll teach them to pick on a human. I wonder what will happen with Kro'nha and Anthea now. Will Ko'tak and Syt'ka rekindle their friendship?
So many questions.
Great Chappie Zellezra
P.s Thank you for you review too. I hope to up date within the next few weeks with a new chapter and some changes to current chapters. I hope, unless life has other ideas. Which sometimes we all know it usually does.
So many questions.
Great Chappie Zellezra
P.s Thank you for you review too. I hope to up date within the next few weeks with a new chapter and some changes to current chapters. I hope, unless life has other ideas. Which sometimes we all know it usually does.
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May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
When the little girl told them what clan she was from I thought "YES." And I had to laugh about the seeing Anthea naked bit. Personally Kro' would probably want to see her naked again. LOL
I hope that nasty Tal'lik gets a taste of his own medicine.
I hope that nasty Tal'lik gets a taste of his own medicine.
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May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hot, sexy, action packed and filled with anticipation. Love the Story Babe. Look forward to seeing what else you got in that beautiful mind of yours.
I give it a 10 out of 10!
Lord Zain
I give it a 10 out of 10!
Lord Zain
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice update, hun! Kro and Anthea are so cute! And the other clan seems bent out of shape. Looking forward to more!