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March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your writing is wonderfully descriptive and full of great imagery. The whole thing was beautifully savage and damn hot. The only piece of constructive criticism I can offer is this: Don’t use the exclamation marks excessively and in succession (ie !!!!!!). You’re not a crap author but crap authors use that a lot. You have a damn fine start here, I hope there are more chapters coming.
What do the asterisks mean?
What do the asterisks mean?