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by Jawala39

person Ventoux
schedule March 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LOL, I really laughed hard during Jack and Lizzie's little argument, poor guy, can't do anything right. And poor Elizabeth, having no control over her body.I like how you made Jack feel both happy and terrified with the prospect of becoming a father, must be a guy thing,it's not the first time I've heard about men getting all weird in the head about being a dad(even our Delicious Mr Depp, reportedly, freaked out)
He should talk to Lizzie though, she is probably scared/nervous herself.
Wonderful chapter, as always.
person Ventoux
schedule February 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YAY, Baby Sparrow *does happydance* Aww, Daddy Jack *melts*. I'm so happy for them. Now, will it be a boy or a girl? I vote for a little girl with her daddy's eyes. Great chapter as always.

“Shhh! M’thinkin’.”

For some reason that made me laugh so hard.I'm still giggeling everytime I read it.
Looking forward to the next update.
person freelke
schedule February 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm so glad you wrote another chapter. I had almost given up hope, but I keep checking anyway :) I loved this chapter, I can't wait to see what angst you come up with next!!!! great job!
schedule February 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww, it's so sweet. I'm all happylike for them. :-)
person Seralyn
schedule February 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
loved your new chapter they finnally managed to do it!!!!

Jack keeps saying him wonder if he is right...

hope to see more soon.

Cheers
Sera
schedule February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh! lovely! I love your story! Too perfect! It's gonna be so much fun to go through a pregnancy with them! THANKS FOR THE OPPORTUNITY!!
schedule February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG! She's pregnant! Finally, it happened! And now Jack will be...a father! OMG OMG!!!

I love this story, I really do! You HAVE to update soon! No, SOONER that soon!

Please?
person Seralyn
schedule February 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just read your whole storie luv it

hope to see more soon

Cheers
Sera
schedule February 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God. That has to be the best chapter I've ever read! They're both acting silly, what with Jack trying to take care of her but being a little too harsh and Elizabeth not realizing that he loves her so much and wants to help her.

Loved the ending! It was HILARIOUS! Great job!

Update soon, I want to see what happens next!
person rosaseravo
schedule February 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Fun chapter! I'm looking forward to these two getting along better though...no squabbling for at least one chapter! ::grin::

PS I think Liz has a bun in the oven.