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by Jawala39

schedule December 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
all I can say - LOVE it very much^^
This was bloody wonderful, mate
plz update soon^^
schedule December 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. Thank you for writing it and I can't wait to read more.
person freelke
schedule December 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
o, I loved it so much, I waited so patiently for this chapter and I was not disappointed. I look forward to the next one already. Please post again soon, I can't get enough of this story. I loved the emotionally charged nature of this chapter but I look forward to some more romance too
person rosaseravo
schedule December 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I reread this and something occurred to me...it seems significant that Jack had been anally raped, and spoke of how awful it was...and then didn't treat Elizabeth as he should have, as though something took him over. I'm wondering if there is a subtext here that the past rape of Jack affected him subconsciously and influenced his behavior? Is he going to achieve a sort of revelation about this? Just musing.
person rosaseravo
schedule December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi there...OK, you said another chapter soon and I hope you mean it because this spat needs to come to an end! =) Sigh. Those two crazy kids need to stop trying the back door because E seems to definitely prefer the front! Or they need to read William Burroughs for some tips. hehe

I have one small technical question...Elizabeth says stop it, later Jack says she didn't say "stop" and Elizabeth thinks, he is right, she didn't say stop. But she did. Does Jack needs to get the wax out of his ears or does Elizabeth needs a memory jog? Or both?

schedule December 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OOh, you reached new and amazing climaxes! (Forgive the pun, I'm thoroughly ashamed already.) I love that they're still finding contention between them. I'll forgive you for not posting sooner. I can't wait for more, you're so bloody brilliant!
person freelke
schedule December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YAY, it seemed like it was forever since the last chapter, but it was SOOO much worth the wait. PLEASE put up the next chapter very soon. I love this story so much I can't wait. Thanks for thissi wonderful story!
schedule December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*Faints* Oh dear Lord! I absolutely LOVED the beginning, and how Lizzie trusted him enough to do that...at first.

And then she got mad at him. *Pouts* And now their upset at each other...or Elizabeth's just...*Shrugs*

Update soon! I loved it!!!! I wanna see how they resolve this!
schedule December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I have NEVER EVER felt anysort of hate for Jack before, until NOW! I can't believe how he treated Lizzie! What a selfish arrogant bastard! I HATE HIM SO MUCH RIGHT NOW!! (in this fic) Lizzie deserves so much better ;(
schedule December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh so sad for both of them! I'm so excited FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!