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Yay! You updated! I loved it! I especially loved the atmosphee you captured throughout this whole chapter! I didn't notice that it was long! I loved how Jack was like the teacher and Lizzie was the student when he explained how that position feels! Great job as usual! Can't wait for the update!

But she did say no. And she said to stop. See?

“Please don’t, you can’t, you won’t fi….OHHH!!”

With one quick thrust he’d done it; pushed his way inside a part of her that was surely not designed to accommodate anything so large. The pain was exquisite. Tears filled her eyes and she clenched her fists, panting hard. It felt as though he would split her in two.

“Stop now,”

Lizzie is not in the wrong. Jack is.

Oh poor Jack, poor Lizzie. She did ask him to stop, kinda, and he did treat her abit like a doxy. But...I dunno, Jack loves her. Doesn't he? How are they gonna sort this out? Can't wait to find out!
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Oh how I love public foreplay! Well done. I'm totally enthralled with this story!

Did I already mention I lurve this story? Thank you so much for your kind words. You can email me at fylmfan@aol.com.

You're killing me :) I keep checking for the next chapter. Worth the wait though :)

Miz Perola Negra, You go to the head of the class this cold evening. Your story has made me all warm and fuzzy--ah, young lust between the Capt'n and Elisabeth, you got the activities all wonderfully bundled up and the diaglouge is fabulous. I can see them as I read your words, they are moving walking laughing and swiving in a beautiful world you made for me to read. Thank you so much for the very hard work you put out in the world and I hope you enjoyed writing this as much as reading pleasured me. Your Elisabeth is so spot on--so true. She's bold and shy, brash and quiet, brave and scared, naive and hot as hell. Jack, ah, Jack, oh, my Jack--you found his voice just right, his funny sense of what's right and the wicked little aspect involving "punishments" to be exacted. Just right fine what you've shared. I am very much in awe of your fertile twisty mind and all that goes on there. More please any time.

I can't wait to see where you take the next chapter. Have a happy thanksgiving holiday :)

One of the best fanfiction novellas I've ever read. In fact, the voices of the characters are so spot-on that I at times wondered if this was written by a Pirates screenwriter as a way of giving something nice to J/E fans who would inevitably be PO'd after seeing At World's End, and found myself trying to see if rearranging letters in "Perola Negro" revealed anything cryptic. It's almost inevitable that fanfic writers will turn Jack or Elizabeth into a version of themselves (I've been guilty of accidentally doing that sort of thing when writing fanfiction myself) but at least as far as I can see, you didn't do that.

Also, it's not easy to write romance about nontraditionally romantic characters without making the characters too soft and sappy, especially when having said characters want babies, but you managed to pull it off. Wow. And there was no need to make Will a jerk or Jack a victim or Elizabeth a sinner who is obligated to be forever repentant and grovelling.

I'm glad you noticed J&E's fondness for nose-nuzzling...I've wondered how many viewers of the movie picked up the fact that Elizabeth nose-nuzzled Jack after she shackled him, which, to me, is more of an expression of love than an actual kiss is, as the kiss can be motivated by lust but the nose-nuzzle is all about emotion. (If there are folks out there who nose-nuzzle out of pure lust, I apologize to you for being presumptious.) :)

If you're written any original material under another penname please consider emailing me and letting me know.

Rosa

Umm...my bad...just to clarify, I meant you DIDN'T make Will a jerk, Jack a victim, etc. I realized after re reading my review that it could read like I was saying you DID make them like that.