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by EvilE

schedule April 22, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Hi, so I actually made an acount for the sole purpose of reviewing this story.

And OH my GOd.

I don't know what to say, actually. The very end, "if he could remember what it was like to want her, then he could remember what it was like to be alive" just killed me. You perfectly captured the apathy Jack was left with and how empty and sad it made him.

Is it just me, or does his constant insistance that he doesn't love her and only wants her sexually point to slight denial of deeper feeling?

Anyway, AMAZING JOB. Made me cry a lil bit, actually.

schedule November 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great!
person julia
schedule August 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
smutty, but at the same time very funny. brilliant work!
schedule June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Delightfully smutty. Oh how I love Jack.
schedule June 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is absolute, divine and sinful perfection. I want more, but it would be too much, it's that perfect. Writer to writer, this is just IT.

Thank you for the filthy moment of perfect beauty.

Kimberlee
person Eillen
schedule June 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
girl! this is hot hot hoooot!
you write so well!
person Jillybean
schedule May 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant - very fun!
person Parlay
schedule April 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was amazingly hot - like all the wonderful drabbles you could ever possibly imagine about Jack and Lizzy rolled into one, glorious lovefest.

You write amazingly - so many writers overdo or underdo sex scenes but yours was just so matter-of-fact, so very, very Jack.

The ending grounds it in the Canon nicely, and adds a touch of bittersweetness to the entire story.

Brilliantly smutty :)
schedule April 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I loved it! I hope he gets the chance to carry out his fantasies!
schedule April 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woo, that was steamy! I agree, you should write a sequel where Lizzie caves into Jack's desires. ;D