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i like how you portray the interactions between brother-soliders that was always alluded to in the movie and never explored. i dont remember whether these were greek or persian soliders (possibly alexander the great's?), but in antiquity, it wasnt uncommon for soldiers to pair up as a fighting team and/or as lovers. it was thought to increase the heart and strength of the army in general and was tolerated and approved in a situation much like what you have set up: duty to sparta as (re)productive citizen and professional soldier, heart and soul to battle and their partner. its a duality in masculinity that always fascinated me in the ancient civilization and military histories, and i love seeing it played out thru '300' and your plot and dialogue. yes, dialogue is good!!! it gives the sense of speed or momentum thru the fic. narration gives the reader an impression of a slower, more observant moment. my only recommendation so far for this fic (i love the idea of stelios and astinos together, its a natural extension from the movie and its really freakin hot) is that you use the balance between dialogue and narration carefully in both the combat and romance scenes. given the nature of the characters and the movie (and culture) they originate in, the sudden shift in perspective and reader /plot momentum helps enhance the feeling that yes, this is really what might have been. i really love this first chapter, and i hope my comments were helpful - i really want to see the next chapter!!

-sighs- I don't care what you think but your story rocks! No complaints and the dialogue? It wasn't complicated at all! I actually enjoyed reading what they'll say and especially what they think. I loved it that you made your story so long and not rushed at all. Like during the water scene, they didn't do it right away, already knowing they loved each other. There's no plot to that! Too quick.

Ahh yeah..it was really good and I enjoyed reading it a lot. I hope you update soon when you have the time. ^_^ Great job yah! -hugs-

Such a wonderful story so far! I can't wait to see where this goes!

I hope it isnt too late! I really like your story!!!! Its building up very well and I really hope you havent stopped writing! I will look for an update!

I love this story so far and can't wait for more. Hurry hurry!

You, my friend, have made me both very happy and very sad at the same time. Here you write this great story, get me addicted to Stelios and Astinos, and then never update. :( Please, please, PLEASE update soon. I need my Stelios/Astinos fix.

i loved this so much and i'm waiting for chapter two, there is one coming right. the fast/still feeling you get when fughting is the greatest kick of all. its nlike you can sense everything around you. i train capoeria and unlike other martial arts you have to be mindful not just your opponent, but possible challangers and onlookers as well, because they are so close that if you don't know were they are, an ouchi is in order. the same goes for show jumping really. it goes straight to my head.

OMG this story is awsome!!! I dont mind if you kept switching POV, cuz you
made them really natural. Eh? a bed in a hole? That's original!! ^________^
sorry 4 my ramblings but I just drank lots of cafeine, + your story rwacks!!!
I hope you'll continue this, and plz update soon!!!seriously dude, keep this up!

Wow, I really love this story! It's so beautiful, and it also manages to be true to the culture. The story skillfully reflects the passion of the characters' deep, conflicted, forbidden love. And all of the notes and links to pictures were really helpful; I thought I recognized the characters by name but the pictures helped to clarify and I was able to visualize everything much better. I did have a hard time following some parts of it. For example, it was often unclear which dialogue belonged to each character. It was so beautiful and passionate and well-developed though that these small difficulties were hardly any bother at all. Please, pretty please update this story soon, it is too wonderful to discontinue!

I like the way you started it off and can't wait to see how you take things. I believe the most difficult thing will be to keep them in character, but your fighting scenes are well done!