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January 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, finally I'm able to give this chapter the time and attention it so rightly deserves.
I gotta say, I'm starting not to like Kayla anymore. The way she is coming across to me as written is someone who is very tempermental and annoying. I can kind of see why Sh'lok was losing interest in her. And again, I can't help but think back to the fact that this whole thing could have been avoided if Kayla had never had asked for Leena to become another mate. I'm still wondering what Kulvir thought of the whole thing, but I think as of this chapter's flashbacks, he's already dead since Stef'na is now a mate as well.
On the other hand, I'm still really amused by Kayla's children and how they all have aspects of her. Kuja definitely has Kayla's stubborness no doubt about it. Jasmine is actually a beath of fresh air because she isn't Kayla and has a completely different personality with a lot of innocence about her. Now that we've gotten the conflict of the siblings out of the way, I can't wait to see what happens once they get back to the home ships and have to tell Tan'oj the truth about Kayla and Ba'naj.
I don't care how long I have to wait, I'll wait as long as it takes for the next chapter. :)
I gotta say, I'm starting not to like Kayla anymore. The way she is coming across to me as written is someone who is very tempermental and annoying. I can kind of see why Sh'lok was losing interest in her. And again, I can't help but think back to the fact that this whole thing could have been avoided if Kayla had never had asked for Leena to become another mate. I'm still wondering what Kulvir thought of the whole thing, but I think as of this chapter's flashbacks, he's already dead since Stef'na is now a mate as well.
On the other hand, I'm still really amused by Kayla's children and how they all have aspects of her. Kuja definitely has Kayla's stubborness no doubt about it. Jasmine is actually a beath of fresh air because she isn't Kayla and has a completely different personality with a lot of innocence about her. Now that we've gotten the conflict of the siblings out of the way, I can't wait to see what happens once they get back to the home ships and have to tell Tan'oj the truth about Kayla and Ba'naj.
I don't care how long I have to wait, I'll wait as long as it takes for the next chapter. :)
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January 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You know... it's too bad that they don't have a smiley system on this forum. Cause right now, i would be using the one of the smiley beating her head against the wall! I still cannot figure this one out. Glad to see an update and of course, I cannot wait to see what happens next! =D
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January 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok I can see the challenge. A four way? WOW
After I took A shower I decided to come write a review. You did a good job. You also gave us more clues. It was without a doubt, Ba'naj, but why. I love how you are now showing a different side to everyone. We see how Sh'lok was able to handle his three mates and the problems he and Kayla still had, also the closeness between Ba'naj and his brother. What I don't understand is Sh'lok had the clues (easy opening, her arousal when they were arguing, which I'm assuming it was because she was with Ba'naj before she went to her quarters to confront Sh'lok) why didn't he put it all together. Kayla was cheating on him! Ohhhhhh the drama
It's so much going on in this chapter I had to read it twice. Each time it was damn good! Thank you so much for updating.
After I took A shower I decided to come write a review. You did a good job. You also gave us more clues. It was without a doubt, Ba'naj, but why. I love how you are now showing a different side to everyone. We see how Sh'lok was able to handle his three mates and the problems he and Kayla still had, also the closeness between Ba'naj and his brother. What I don't understand is Sh'lok had the clues (easy opening, her arousal when they were arguing, which I'm assuming it was because she was with Ba'naj before she went to her quarters to confront Sh'lok) why didn't he put it all together. Kayla was cheating on him! Ohhhhhh the drama
It's so much going on in this chapter I had to read it twice. Each time it was damn good! Thank you so much for updating.
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December 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
What I really enjoy the most about this chapter ( and your writing in general ) .... the children have some of the personalities of the parents. Now I don't know if you strategically put that together, but wow it is great!. Ku'mar reminds me so much of Kul'vir when he was angry. Kuja is a lot like Kayla and Shra'van is his green eyed father. Su'ram reminds me of how Sh'lok used to be when he met Kayla. Mi'tra has way too much testosterone in her blood LOL.... Poor Jasmine need to get some backbone before someone tries to really kill her. She is weak, but if Ta'noj only wants her as a breeder then I guess she will do.
Your story telling is excellent. You greatly pulled off going in the past to tell a story of the present without confusing the reader. I sit and wait in anticipation for the next chapter.
Feliz Navidad!!
Your story telling is excellent. You greatly pulled off going in the past to tell a story of the present without confusing the reader. I sit and wait in anticipation for the next chapter.
Feliz Navidad!!
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December 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good one Circle. I hope Stef'na's sons leave before they really find Ta'noj. Next Chappie please. XD
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December 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thanks...wow! Stehna's sons. Interesting. Leena twenty babies? It has been centuries since Kayla passed. Is Banaj training from coping or for confronting Kayla's killer? What is jasmine thinking> She is so ...weak in the head. I hope her condition improves. I want Shlok!
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December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Man oh Man!! I just know that the shit is gonna go down. Hard and fast. I can't wait! Glad to see you are still putting around. Can't wait for the next update.
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December 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Damn, what a hot and suspensful chapter. Your writing never ceases to amaze me. Things are coming to a head it looks like and the tension in the air is one could drink it all in. I cannot wait to see where you will go from here with this immediate issue of Stephna's sons.
Bravo as usual.
Bravo as usual.
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December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Happy holidays!
LilTinyBee - no I never published anything. I just enjoy writing on aff!
LilTinyBee - no I never published anything. I just enjoy writing on aff!
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November 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thank you so much for updating. I've been waiting on pins and needles for this chapter. It's an awesome story and the plot is amazing as well. Please update soon, I can't wait to find out what happens next.