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OMG! I WANT HIM TO "BEND HER OVER AND FUCK HER SENSELESS!" THERE NEEDS TO BE, ( if u were not planning it otherwise) SOME GOOD RAPE DAVY JONES STORIES ON HERE, U SHLD DO THAT! BUT THAT WAS REALLY GOOD! PLS UPDATE SOON!

i'd like to find that out myself...or even over the pipe organ in his chambers..the possibilities are endless...keep it up mate

it's a pretty good start. i'd like to see where you go with this. i think my username says it all...i just love these kinds of stories, as long as there's a happy ending for my sexy cephalopod!

i like this chapter better than the one you had before but i there one was good too tough. please update soon

keep on with the story. its really good. update soon please!! ;]

Actually Disney doesn't own the song lyrics. Loreena McKennitt does. Remember to mention that as well in your disclaimers ;) Other than that: This looks very promising, though you should have merged the two chapters into one rather than jumping back and forth in the timeline for such short bits and pieces. And don't bother writing "Flashback!" Start the flashback with "He remembered how she had first appeared a 100 years ago" or something like it. In the middle of a chapter in a book you don't see a headline with the word Flashback in the midst of it all. It breaks the flow of the story and detracts from the reading experience :) A ghostly OFC is new to me. I'm looking forward to seeing where you're planning on going with this :)

keep it up, you were very ebil for making us think u updated.

i like the story please continue i would to read what happens between the girl and davy jones lol

Sounds good so far!

k, i like it so far, keep it up. i hate Calypso