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August 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
you are a GODDESS in my heart. i truly LOVE you right now.
would you be freaked out if i proposed??? :-D
would you be freaked out if i proposed??? :-D
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August 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter, again - and I didn't expect it that soon - thanks, you made my day! :-)
I love how he speaks to her without turning around. That's Barbossa, always attentive.
I would like to know much more about these mysterious women of his former life.
I love how he speaks to her without turning around. That's Barbossa, always attentive.
I would like to know much more about these mysterious women of his former life.
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August 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good gracious me...if you're not writing this material professionally already, you should be. This was incredible - what a fantastic read! The dialogue is so well done - both Hector and Elizabeth are very in-character, and while it seems slightly unusual to read about Barbossa being described as anything other than a seedy old salty dog, well, that's probably just my personal preference speaking as I've no complaints whatever about him being a red-haired love-god as portrayed here. And amazingly well-written as, well, all the sex is, I'm highly intrigued by the hints of 'other stuff' you've included - what about those tatoos, eh? Eh?
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August 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa. I am stunned and speechless.
More? Soon?
More? Soon?
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July 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story to read (for the second time *g*), I especially love your Barbossa - he's really like *himself* in the movies. And I like how you bring up Jack all the time... just for fun.
And how you bring their bodies into the story, the hair, the skin, their arousal. If I had something to say I would like to read more about Barbossa's hair, not only Elizabeth's. I love this braid of him. *g*
Thanks for sharing - I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
And how you bring their bodies into the story, the hair, the skin, their arousal. If I had something to say I would like to read more about Barbossa's hair, not only Elizabeth's. I love this braid of him. *g*
Thanks for sharing - I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
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July 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WHoo! Highly charged and very erotic, and I am really looking forward to the next chapter-- a little birdy told me that... well, now, I shan't spill the beans *wink*
The emotions are believable, and although you described every little thing in minute detail-- it reads flowingly and that's the way I want it anyway. I love the sex action, and the give-and-take between the two of them.
My criticisms; Barbossa's language is probably a bit too convoluted. for instance; Be ye certain yer not in need of me to take ye now, girl? not that I can offer you a substitute, but Barbossa only speaks that way a few times, as a tease. On the other hand, lines like; Finish with yer nursin’ or I’ll batter ye from aloft!” (ch 3) are fabulous!
Just my own preference, but I don't like the spelling "cum" even though it's currently acceptable. "Come," however, is poetically accurate, IMO...
Chapter six, huh? huh?
The emotions are believable, and although you described every little thing in minute detail-- it reads flowingly and that's the way I want it anyway. I love the sex action, and the give-and-take between the two of them.
My criticisms; Barbossa's language is probably a bit too convoluted. for instance; Be ye certain yer not in need of me to take ye now, girl? not that I can offer you a substitute, but Barbossa only speaks that way a few times, as a tease. On the other hand, lines like; Finish with yer nursin’ or I’ll batter ye from aloft!” (ch 3) are fabulous!
Just my own preference, but I don't like the spelling "cum" even though it's currently acceptable. "Come," however, is poetically accurate, IMO...
Chapter six, huh? huh?
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oooooooooooooooooooooh! she's in deeeeeeeeeeeeep sh*t!
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July 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy mother of... cold shower time.
But at the same time... SHE CALLED HIM JACK?! Omg! Actually yelled "WHAT?!" at reading that.
As always, superbly written - loved every word! And most certainly can't wait for more!
Hope she familiarises herself with his name soon too!
But at the same time... SHE CALLED HIM JACK?! Omg! Actually yelled "WHAT?!" at reading that.
As always, superbly written - loved every word! And most certainly can't wait for more!
Hope she familiarises herself with his name soon too!
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
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i want chapter five right now. LOL
WOW!
i want chapter five right now. LOL
WOW!
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July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god... YES I WANT CHAPTER FIVE! This is... amazing... corr and phwoar are the only words that I can use at the moment. Fantastic writing, had me hooked all the way through. Loved it. F x