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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I was so thrilled to see that you'd updated! Was afraid you'd lost interest, or run out of time, but happily that is not the case, and you didn't disappoint with this latest chapter! I have to admit, I really laughed when Jodi thought perhaps she'd been tackled by Amish people!lol And it was such a thrill to read about the Hessian! You've captured him as a soldier and as a warrior, that's for certain!
Now, as to how to capture the rest of him...(sounds like fun!)...thank you for your many compliments on how I did that, but it's actually simpler than you think. Get to know him in the context that you are writing him. What I mean is, he's got a real bloodlust thing going on, and yet (I surmise) he's going to hold some type of want, need, affection, desire for Jodi. What kind of man can do that? It was obvious to me in the movie that he wasn't completely hard, he LOVED Daredevil, so I just expanded on that. Other things to consider when trying to "find" him: how old is he? What's his upbringing? Is he, or has he ever been married, in love? Children? Does he drink? Smoke? Whore? How'd he get to be a mercenary? Keep asking those questions, and when you get them answered, ask "why?" You can do it, it's fun, and with a character like the Hessian, it can't help but be interesting! I think you'll find as you go along that (like most of us) he's got personas--one at work, and one when he's with friends, lovers, whatever.
I'm looking very forward to seeing what you come up with! If you want to bounce ideas off of anyone, my email address is still that which is listed when you click on my name. I could talk about the Hessian forever, so you wouldn't be bothering me at all! But, you write very well, your images are very vivid and prominent, you can find him, and it won't take as long as you think!
As far as his name goes, look for a list of Tutonic names, I bet you find one you like!
Great chapter! Hope there's more soon!
Grace
Now, as to how to capture the rest of him...(sounds like fun!)...thank you for your many compliments on how I did that, but it's actually simpler than you think. Get to know him in the context that you are writing him. What I mean is, he's got a real bloodlust thing going on, and yet (I surmise) he's going to hold some type of want, need, affection, desire for Jodi. What kind of man can do that? It was obvious to me in the movie that he wasn't completely hard, he LOVED Daredevil, so I just expanded on that. Other things to consider when trying to "find" him: how old is he? What's his upbringing? Is he, or has he ever been married, in love? Children? Does he drink? Smoke? Whore? How'd he get to be a mercenary? Keep asking those questions, and when you get them answered, ask "why?" You can do it, it's fun, and with a character like the Hessian, it can't help but be interesting! I think you'll find as you go along that (like most of us) he's got personas--one at work, and one when he's with friends, lovers, whatever.
I'm looking very forward to seeing what you come up with! If you want to bounce ideas off of anyone, my email address is still that which is listed when you click on my name. I could talk about the Hessian forever, so you wouldn't be bothering me at all! But, you write very well, your images are very vivid and prominent, you can find him, and it won't take as long as you think!
As far as his name goes, look for a list of Tutonic names, I bet you find one you like!
Great chapter! Hope there's more soon!
Grace
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August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Uh...oh Wow. 0_o
Well, I haven't expected this amount of feedback, and I thank you. However, I'm sorry to say that the writing of the next chapters will take longer than expected. The next chapter will certainly take a while for it to go on display, since I'm now writing two drafts or versions. The Hessian is certainly such an awe-inspiring character it's difficult to capture his personality (Grace Lee, how do you do it?!), so that's why I'm being cautious with the writing. Still, the chapters are coming along nicely, if only my schedule hasn't became busier and busier, and if only there would be less competition back home on who gets to go on our only computer. *laughs*
So yeah, I will most definitely try to finish them up as quickly as I can, and will do my best to try to satisfy you guys. In the meantime, have patience, lovely people, and thank you so much for your comments. ^^
P.S. And yes, I am MOST DEFINITELY looking for a name that suits the Hessian, be it ironic or something that sounds masculine and kick-@$$. Ideas are very welcome if you'd like. ^^
Well, I haven't expected this amount of feedback, and I thank you. However, I'm sorry to say that the writing of the next chapters will take longer than expected. The next chapter will certainly take a while for it to go on display, since I'm now writing two drafts or versions. The Hessian is certainly such an awe-inspiring character it's difficult to capture his personality (Grace Lee, how do you do it?!), so that's why I'm being cautious with the writing. Still, the chapters are coming along nicely, if only my schedule hasn't became busier and busier, and if only there would be less competition back home on who gets to go on our only computer. *laughs*
So yeah, I will most definitely try to finish them up as quickly as I can, and will do my best to try to satisfy you guys. In the meantime, have patience, lovely people, and thank you so much for your comments. ^^
P.S. And yes, I am MOST DEFINITELY looking for a name that suits the Hessian, be it ironic or something that sounds masculine and kick-@$$. Ideas are very welcome if you'd like. ^^
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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh keep this up please!! it's really good!! i can't wait to read about her and the hessian! will you give him a name like heinrich or albrecht? i've always liked those names. they fit him quite nicely i think. keep it up please! update soon!!!
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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is looking pretty interesting. I hope you update soon. I was really interested in seeing more stories with the Horseman involved. I'm curios as to how you'll have this all come about. Till next, chapter then. I await with anticipation.
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July 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
So when does she meet HIM? This is really going along nicely! I like Jodi and can't wait to see what your version of The Hessian is like! Hurry and write some more soon!
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July 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, glad to see another story about the Hessian where his main romantic interest isn't Ichabod! I can't wait for him to make his enterance! Jodi is fleshed out very well, and the plot is wonderful! I'm looking forward to "watching" Jodi and the Hessian interact! Keep going!
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July 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ooh i like this approach...is she gonna fall in love with the horseman? hey that witch wasnt katrina was it?