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June 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well it's about time! LOL, just kidding. You know that I would wait until the ends of time for an update. But now that one is here, I can review it. And I shall! Here goes...Um, yeah, what was I saying? I can't remember for the life of me. All I can see is some silly statue! LOL
No seriously, that was great. I'm glad that Lyra is finally going to get some help. I can't wait to see Da'ar kick Bha'ruck's ass. And what is going on with Ji'ran? I totally did not see that coming at all! Great work and I can't wait to see more. =D
No seriously, that was great. I'm glad that Lyra is finally going to get some help. I can't wait to see Da'ar kick Bha'ruck's ass. And what is going on with Ji'ran? I totally did not see that coming at all! Great work and I can't wait to see more. =D
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June 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Than you for ending this torchore...
Please post more soon.
Please post more soon.
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March 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love this story.
I hope that Bha'ruk doesn't mate with Natra. Maybe the emergence of the arbitrator in disguise, will help save Natra and maybe they will fall for each other?? It seems like nobody likes Bha'ruk's rule, even O'ni seemed like he felt bad for Natra.
I can't believe that bastard cut her hair off?!? Hopefully her hair grows back fast.
Have I mentioned yet that I love this story? :-)
I hope that Bha'ruk doesn't mate with Natra. Maybe the emergence of the arbitrator in disguise, will help save Natra and maybe they will fall for each other?? It seems like nobody likes Bha'ruk's rule, even O'ni seemed like he felt bad for Natra.
I can't believe that bastard cut her hair off?!? Hopefully her hair grows back fast.
Have I mentioned yet that I love this story? :-)
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February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Really good, I can't wait for the next chapter.
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February 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Cool, another chapter - it was good.
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February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter, The elder got quite a surprise lol, please hurry and make the next chapter I look forward to see more
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February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WHOOHOO!! I am SOSOSOSO excited!! I finally get to leave a review!!!
OH...what should I say...hm, how about...I like the under lying theme that's here. Very different. And I can't wait to see what happens next. Hopefully, soon, someone will kick the shit out of Bah'ruk! He definitely deserves it! Waiting till the next update...
OH...what should I say...hm, how about...I like the under lying theme that's here. Very different. And I can't wait to see what happens next. Hopefully, soon, someone will kick the shit out of Bah'ruk! He definitely deserves it! Waiting till the next update...
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February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow this is great hope to see more asap...
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September 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Musey, I am sorry that it took me so long to review chapter 2, but I was at a loss for words. The way you can create new creatures and make them seem so real is beyond me. This story is fantastic and I do hope you continue to add more of your wonderful creatures to it. So please update soon.
Ar'Shiya
Ar'Shiya
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oho, what a very nice update. I'd normally just be thrilled with any update in this section now, but you went and made it very good too. :)
Now we've met the elder Bah'ruk, and he's just as merciless as was built up. Clearly not a nice sort as none of the females he's taken have even slightly warmed up to him. Ta'al seems to be the only one on that ship with a conscience, but as he made clear, there's no way he could face up to Bah'ruk and survive.
I like how original your characters are turning out to be. Lyra has a strong sense of pride and doesn't seem to be one who will be broken easily. The other captive aliens are also very unique in their experiences too. You've definitely got a good story going here, so hopefully you'll continue it, especially after that cliffhanger ending :)
Now we've met the elder Bah'ruk, and he's just as merciless as was built up. Clearly not a nice sort as none of the females he's taken have even slightly warmed up to him. Ta'al seems to be the only one on that ship with a conscience, but as he made clear, there's no way he could face up to Bah'ruk and survive.
I like how original your characters are turning out to be. Lyra has a strong sense of pride and doesn't seem to be one who will be broken easily. The other captive aliens are also very unique in their experiences too. You've definitely got a good story going here, so hopefully you'll continue it, especially after that cliffhanger ending :)