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for My Captain

by Cinnamontea

person Weird Angel
schedule December 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh captain, my captain!

..... Sooo... Wheres the rest?
Please continue.
person Swirling Dreams
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god! This is so good! You have to keep writing, I want them to fuck each other! You have to update! Please. :-)
person mino
schedule October 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yay an update,I wasn't sure if you were going to update again.
I really like this story, can't wait for the next chapter.
*throws you magic cookie*
person CZ
schedule September 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like the story.

Oh, and the whipping guy isn't the bowsome, it's bo'sun. Just FYI.
person mariteri
schedule September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good job. You should have a beta reader though to take care of those type-o's you made. The story is good, the writing is as well, and it's about time someone wrote a love story for Davy Jones! Great going and please update soon.
schedule September 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
now or later...hmmm why not both....keep it up
schedule September 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i know what i'd like for him to do with her....and i hope she will have a happy ending
schedule September 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*Snort* too funny!!! i wonder what he wanted to do to her? i hope he gets to do it soon. by the way, the Bosun's name is Jimmylegs.
schedule September 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A very nice start; I love the story. One thing distracts me, however; you often use a full stop (period) where there ought to be a comma. This is improper grammar, and makes it very difficult to read, because, as a reader, my line of thought and my sight is pulled up short by a period. Please continue writing, keeping this in mind, because you have a good story going on here.


KaS