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Poor Jack. Please update soon!!

I really enjoyed this story, but you do have a few issues with inconsistency. One example of this is in Chapters 13 & 14. Jack's fingers are reset, but he's supposedly able to take off a shirt. In the same chapter (I believe it is, anyway) He's exposed himself to Will by taking of his pants, but Will doesn't seem to notice how thin he is until he sees him without a shirt. One moment he can hardly move, the next he can get up at a natural rate.

I love your story, it's got enough angst to keep me completely enthralled for hours. You have little bubbles with consistency, but your writing style is wonderful and your plot is interesting. What's even more wonderful is that your use of various words to describe the same thing. Its encouraging to see that there are at least /a few/ authors who still use their thesauruses! Anyway, I thought I'd just throw my two cents in. Please keep writing, I love your stories.

NO! WILL PLEASE! Jack needs you! Please! Update soon!

More! Need more! It's just so good. I want to see how Jack copes and how he heals and hopefully how he and Will get together. Please, please, please continue.

Excellent chapter...so...Will and Jack...please?

I cried for Jack. Its not fair. Jack sparrow should never be reduced to that...*sobs into hands* o...I take it Jack will hook up with Will? eh? EH? that would be a pleasanbt change from...everyone else he has been with so far. Update soon!

oh....poor Jack. I hope they find him in time.