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May 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic chapter just like the rest of the story. Please update soon
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May 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well done! The way your characters interact with each other is so real and easy to visualize. I have to say again that I just love how Isis and Ali act together. And again that Ali-shir is adorable in his own gruff, indignant way.
I never got to read this story before you began editing it, so I have no way of measuring how you have changed the characters. But I assure you that whatever you've done, you've done it well and good. You have a cast of funny, interesting, bitchy and awesome Yautja (and Vae).
And I really cannot WAIT to see Ali-shir kick Joi'en's ass.
I never got to read this story before you began editing it, so I have no way of measuring how you have changed the characters. But I assure you that whatever you've done, you've done it well and good. You have a cast of funny, interesting, bitchy and awesome Yautja (and Vae).
And I really cannot WAIT to see Ali-shir kick Joi'en's ass.
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nothing feels old about your revision of this story. It has been rejuvenated, and I can't wait to read more!
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've finally read all the chapters and i am caught up !!! Bravo !!! Bravo !!! You defiently have me hooked.. Your writting is just awesome.. I feel like i'm actually there watching everything... And of course love all the sexual tension... Bravo !! Bravo !!! Keep it coming !!!
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've finally read all the chapters and i am caught up !!! Bravo !!! Bravo !!! You defiently have me hooked.. Your writting is just awesome.. I feel like i'm actually there watching everything... And of course love all the sexual tension... Bravo !! Bravo !!! Keep it coming !!!
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another awesome chapter. I kinda feel like Isis, all hot and bothered under the collar. But I loved it anywayz. I did see a few typos, tho. I believe they started out on the couch and in the next paragraph they are on the bed. I might have missed the move, but I really don't think so. Other than that, it was breathtaking as usual. Keep up the great work and I cant' wait for the next one. =)
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Omg. I have to say that I loved the chapter :3 Although I wish Isis could have finished kicking Kai's ass >>
Anyways, omfg, the whole Joi'en and Isis thing just makes you on edge the whole time XD I kept biting my knuckles thinking that someone was gonna slip or something was going to happen X.x It was very nerve wracking :3 Good job
Yeah, I know he's a work in progress.. he can be so irritating one moment, and then 'Yay!' worthy the next XD But that's why we all love him XDXD
Anyways, yay for the update and can't wait for the next!!
Anyways, omfg, the whole Joi'en and Isis thing just makes you on edge the whole time XD I kept biting my knuckles thinking that someone was gonna slip or something was going to happen X.x It was very nerve wracking :3 Good job
Yeah, I know he's a work in progress.. he can be so irritating one moment, and then 'Yay!' worthy the next XD But that's why we all love him XDXD
Anyways, yay for the update and can't wait for the next!!
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yay, a bitch fight. Isis actually got to lunch on that beitch's a....hair lol. Kai deserved that and more. Excellent chappie Keenstuff.
*Shorty taps Keen on the shoulder. Keen turns and sees her friend grinning. Shorty then leans into Keen and whispers before running off giggling* Ali'shir's a pussy tease.
P.s Isis is a prick tease too. hehe
*Shorty taps Keen on the shoulder. Keen turns and sees her friend grinning. Shorty then leans into Keen and whispers before running off giggling* Ali'shir's a pussy tease.
P.s Isis is a prick tease too. hehe
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May 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm having to forcefully keep myself from gushing, and I'm finding it difficult - all I want to do is repeat my undying love for this fic in capital letters with hearts and smileyfaces and so on and so forth. But I'm controlling myself.
This is one of the best stories I've ever read. The character development is so real, and the pacing is flawless. I love Isis, she's formidable without being tiresome and Ali is absolutely delectable. And I love them together. And I love how Ali made that name mistake a second time. Poor guy...
And I want a little Yautja baby!!!
Okay, I let my control slip for a second, but I'm better now. No more gushing.
I just read the entire thing straight through; I couldn't put it down (or rather, leave my computer screen). And I can't wait for an update. Happy writing.
This is one of the best stories I've ever read. The character development is so real, and the pacing is flawless. I love Isis, she's formidable without being tiresome and Ali is absolutely delectable. And I love them together. And I love how Ali made that name mistake a second time. Poor guy...
And I want a little Yautja baby!!!
Okay, I let my control slip for a second, but I'm better now. No more gushing.
I just read the entire thing straight through; I couldn't put it down (or rather, leave my computer screen). And I can't wait for an update. Happy writing.
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May 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow!!! i just found this story and its awesome.. I'm only on chapter four and i am already hooked... Your writting makes me feel like i'm there viewing it all!! Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.. Update soon i hope!!!