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Excellent story! I have read it in two days and I love how you described the relationship between James and his wife. How they grew to love each other and faced the difficulties of marriage and of life. Please continue it!

Ok, so I made an account just so I could review this story! I have to say you are by far the BEST fanfiction writer I have ever had the privilege of reading! Every single one of your stories is one that I find myself reading over and over. I love the accuracy of the characters and the attitudes for the era that they are living in are all spot on! You have allowed me to read the first GOOD James Norrington story I have ever found, and yet I find that you have written two! Very exciting day for me! Anyway, I love your stuff and would greatly appreciate it if you were to post MORE! Thank you!

I really like this story...it's fantastic with all your descriptions. And the character of Aislinn in wonderful...I can't wait to read more!! Hope you update very soon!!

JackSparrowsWench

What an interesting story. I was unsure reading it in the beginning - but am liking the way it's panning out.
Patriarchal systems kicking out from an angle not considered before. I wish I could explain it a little better, but I'll continue to review.
~Pained.

It's almost painful to 'watch' the two develop. Their both - struggling to find their own charcters in relation to the other - I think your moulding the story beautifully. Initially I was slightly horrified at Norrington - though I was vaugely aware that his actions and expectations towards his wife would have been - rigid. But he is trying. I very much like this padded out Norrington.

I have to say, this was the first Norrington fic I have ever read. And I must say that it was a complete and utter joy to read. You are very talented. I was completely draw in from the moment I began reading it, and I felt as though I was watching a movie, rather than reading a story. I did read it in one go, and I was sad to finish the last chapter. It was a nice change to read about a caring, compassionate, and passionate Norrington. We did get to see a bit of that side of him in the movies, but here, we were able to see him as a man, rather than an officer, though, obviously, we did read about that aspect of him too...but I'm sure you get what I am trying to say here. ^.^ This is a beautiful story. Thank you for taking the time to share with us such a well thought out, and well characterized story. I look forward to reading more of it. ^.^ XXOO

Yes you came back again XD I was so surprised when I saw you updated all your stories, you made me like Norrington even more than the others male character in PotC !!

This is such a great story! I love it and I can't wait to read more! I hope you update soon!!

I was in the middle of reading Chapter 11 just now when I had to stop and review. First, some constructive criticism:

-There are some grammatical and spelling errors which unfortunately do distract from the story. For example, you seem not to know whether to use "to" or "too" in certain instances. "Too" is an adverb used in place of also (or in addition to) or to express that something is more excessive than desired, necessary, or possible. While "to" is used in a variety of different instances as a preposition, an infinitive marker and an adverb, it is never used the same way "too" is used. Hopefully that'll help with that.

-In the beginning of the story, Aislinn was described as having green eyes. Somewhere in the middle of the story she is described as having blue eyes with no explanation as to why the change was made. Things like this also distract from the story.

I would recommend finding a beta as they can catch these things for you before you publish your stories.

As for your characterization of Norrington, I must compliment you. I think, for the most part, you are doing a very good job with him. Some things seem a bit out of character, but mostly I can actually hear him and see him in my head doing as you describe. I also like that you are taking your time with the relationship between Norrington and his wife and are not rushing forward with gratuitous sex and whatnot. The story, so far, is moving at a nice pace. The only reason I can think of that you are not getting reviewed more is really just because not as many people are as interested in reading about James Norrington as they are in the more popular characters of PotC. That's a shame, really, because they are missing out on a pretty good story.

Kohl

This is one of the better stories I've read in a VERY long time! Your character is amazing, and I love the way you're writing Norrington. And everyone else for that matter. You are quite talented you know...

I'll be waiting for the next installment... eagerly.

- M