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May 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I blame karine!!! you did not use ass or fuck once in this story even when it could have been quite appropriate. Anyways i found the story rather disturbing, first time i witness tuxedo fetish. The humour was most beneficial to your story as a whole and quite educational (i learnt that mastoidectomy meant brain surgery).
All in all not bad just a little too superficial at certain parts where it shows that you are trying to hard for a refined vocabulary and you are not being yourself.
Cheers, and get to work on off centre yaoi!! CHAU RULEZ!!!!! just read the wall!!!
All in all not bad just a little too superficial at certain parts where it shows that you are trying to hard for a refined vocabulary and you are not being yourself.
Cheers, and get to work on off centre yaoi!! CHAU RULEZ!!!!! just read the wall!!!