rate_review Reviews

Wow, I wonder why I haven't read this story before?

this is really well written! the run-on sentences get a little annoying and you lose the point of the sentence, but other than that i really like how you developed the plot! the first chapter could have been split up into a few more paragraphs too btw ^^

This is pretty good. I'm excited to read more.

Have you ever wanted to stab a baby because something has a wonderful plot that could have went someplace, but aforementioned plot is killt by a fast writing style? I had one of those moments. The characters could have been painted better, and you know it. The chapters are amazingly brief and show little plot development. I mean, I wanted a really good read, and whilst it was a fun (and terribly-written) masturbation scene, it just didn't do it for me. I love the potential this plot shows; however, I would also enjoy it if you showed some EFFORT.

~Bradly~

P.S. – Your grammar is amazing: I think this is the first time I am not complaining about incorrect usage!

Its great, I love The Covenant fanfics, and this one looks great. Please keep putting more on.