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August 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm usually a HB/John fan, but I'm enjoying this very much. I don't really have much more to add to that, just thought I'd let you know. I do check a couple of times a week to see if you've updated, so you've definitely caught my attention.
Smile,
Lady D
Smile,
Lady D
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August 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You can't leave me hanging like that! I need more.
Seriously, this is brilliant written and I can just feel the emotions between HB & Bethany. You need to write more :)
Seriously, this is brilliant written and I can just feel the emotions between HB & Bethany. You need to write more :)
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August 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is great! i can hardly find any HB/OC fics on here or anywhere and this one is great, please update soon
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August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hello. I think that your story 'Finding Home' is brilliant. Please continue it!
I love the way you have integrated Bethany into the story - she feels like one of the characters in the Hellboy universe. Your chapters are large and you have a great way with words, both in terms of conveying action and emotion. The build up of tension and the feeling of Bethany and Hellboy liking one another just feels natural. It is extremely rare to find an eloquent story on this site that isn't sex with no point, or doesn't make you cringe at the way the characters are speaking or acting.
Congratulations on a brilliant story. Please update soon, as I eagerly await the next chapter! I think your writing is fab :)
I love the way you have integrated Bethany into the story - she feels like one of the characters in the Hellboy universe. Your chapters are large and you have a great way with words, both in terms of conveying action and emotion. The build up of tension and the feeling of Bethany and Hellboy liking one another just feels natural. It is extremely rare to find an eloquent story on this site that isn't sex with no point, or doesn't make you cringe at the way the characters are speaking or acting.
Congratulations on a brilliant story. Please update soon, as I eagerly await the next chapter! I think your writing is fab :)
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August 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
keep going i like it
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August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like "Finding Home". Your male charakters are very fascinating and I can`t wait to read what will do Hellboy. And what is ahead of ours heroes :)
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August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's really no fault of your own that you're not getting responses here. If you're looking for comments, turn your story into a M/M. This section is more into slash, mainly and *especially* John and Hellboy, poorly written or othwerise. Hellboy and Liz stories to a lesser extent, also poorly written or otherwise.
Overall, your story is fine. Decent writing, pacing, backstory. Bethany seems like a relatable enough character. The only fault I see is everything at the BPRD seemes to suddenly be centered around her and her ablities (slight mary-sueness)and the pairing between she and HB is a little slow going. Spend more time building up the tension between the two, getting them into hot situations and you'll probably draw more attention to your story.
Best of luck.
Overall, your story is fine. Decent writing, pacing, backstory. Bethany seems like a relatable enough character. The only fault I see is everything at the BPRD seemes to suddenly be centered around her and her ablities (slight mary-sueness)and the pairing between she and HB is a little slow going. Spend more time building up the tension between the two, getting them into hot situations and you'll probably draw more attention to your story.
Best of luck.
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August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Finally! A good HellBoy fic has been created! I was expecting more stories since the new movie came out but...blah none. Except this wonderously awesome story! If you ever need feed back just ask me because I can guarantee that you will get it. Can't wait for what's next! Roni
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August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
More Please. I'm really liking this.
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I chuckled at the ending.
You got a start of a Mary-Sue.
I will say some people may find it hard to read because of it.
But.
I skimmed it.
You have the sarcasm, intriguing char, and leaves the relationship to be figured out.
Looks like a HB/OC fic in the making from what Ive read so far.
Keep working dear.
There is much to be accomplished.
w/♥
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You got a start of a Mary-Sue.
I will say some people may find it hard to read because of it.
But.
I skimmed it.
You have the sarcasm, intriguing char, and leaves the relationship to be figured out.
Looks like a HB/OC fic in the making from what Ive read so far.
Keep working dear.
There is much to be accomplished.
w/♥
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