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October 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
i need to know how th story ends!! please finish it!!!
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August 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
please update!
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May 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Dear God, this story is pure genius! You must update soon! I look forward to it! :D
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March 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Really good! I can't wait to read more!
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October 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Such a pity if you don't continue this story.
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September 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
please please write more!!!! I have to know how it ends!!!
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November 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoy your story!
I love how you keep the characters believable.
Please update soon!
I love how you keep the characters believable.
Please update soon!
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January 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hello,
Will you be updating this story? I have it saved on my comp and check it daily but if you have no plans on continuing with it I'm going to delete it from my comp to save me some space. I do hope you do add to it because it's a great story but if you can't... well then that's just the way it is. Please let me know either way.
Many thanks!
Will you be updating this story? I have it saved on my comp and check it daily but if you have no plans on continuing with it I'm going to delete it from my comp to save me some space. I do hope you do add to it because it's a great story but if you can't... well then that's just the way it is. Please let me know either way.
Many thanks!
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December 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That is just out and out cruel!! You're as demonic as Jareth. Update soon, please!!!
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December 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I almost didn't read this because I saw you had only two chapters and hadn't updated in awhile. I'm glad I did, though. This is an interesting twist on the usual fanfic. You've given Sarah a whole new set of problems (I like that she's raising Toby on her own. I think it will make her a little tougher). I like how it was Toby who wished them away, and how he wants to stay in the Underground - and is wondering how he can get his sister to want the same. I can imagine Toby coming up with all kinds of schemes to convince Sarah to stay.
On the down side, though, it sort of kills me that you introduced Jareth into the story and then haven't updated in so long! The only other critique I have about this is, in the beginning right after we learn about the parents' death, I got a little confused that the next paragraph was a time jump. A small symbol between those two paragraphs, or an extra couple of spaces, would make that clearer.
I hope you haven't abandoned this story entirely. It's always so disheartening to read something as well-written and as intriguing as this story only to have it discontinued (although, I do understand how real life can forestall the urge or ability to write). I'll keep my eye out and will eagerly read a new chapter when you have the chance to update!
~cu-kid
On the down side, though, it sort of kills me that you introduced Jareth into the story and then haven't updated in so long! The only other critique I have about this is, in the beginning right after we learn about the parents' death, I got a little confused that the next paragraph was a time jump. A small symbol between those two paragraphs, or an extra couple of spaces, would make that clearer.
I hope you haven't abandoned this story entirely. It's always so disheartening to read something as well-written and as intriguing as this story only to have it discontinued (although, I do understand how real life can forestall the urge or ability to write). I'll keep my eye out and will eagerly read a new chapter when you have the chance to update!
~cu-kid