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January 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
HAHAHA! I started giggling when I read the title to this chapter and continued to do so through the rest of it. I loved the, "You're mother was an aardvark!" line *snickers*
At the end of the previous chapter, I was a little uncertain if I would like Jareth in this - I mean, the way he acts is so...strange. But as I was reading this latest installment, I realized that it just makes sense. I mean, he's used to being...flamboyant and theatrical in his own world, it only makes sense that he would continue to be that way no matter where he went. I like it!
I think Draco's a little trouble maker ;) What is he up to, taking Sarah on a date? And how mad is Jareth going to be when he finds out (because I think he will...)? It'll be a great read, I'm sure!
OH! And I LOVED Sarah using her magic on Jareth! That was hilarious! I'm interested to find out what, exactly, his reaction to that is going to be - obviously he was angry, but did he know she possessed the ability and that she could use it against him? And, now that he's bunking at her place and working with her, I can only imagine the amusing situations they could get themselves into.
Great update and, of course, I'm looking forward to more!
~cu-kid
At the end of the previous chapter, I was a little uncertain if I would like Jareth in this - I mean, the way he acts is so...strange. But as I was reading this latest installment, I realized that it just makes sense. I mean, he's used to being...flamboyant and theatrical in his own world, it only makes sense that he would continue to be that way no matter where he went. I like it!
I think Draco's a little trouble maker ;) What is he up to, taking Sarah on a date? And how mad is Jareth going to be when he finds out (because I think he will...)? It'll be a great read, I'm sure!
OH! And I LOVED Sarah using her magic on Jareth! That was hilarious! I'm interested to find out what, exactly, his reaction to that is going to be - obviously he was angry, but did he know she possessed the ability and that she could use it against him? And, now that he's bunking at her place and working with her, I can only imagine the amusing situations they could get themselves into.
Great update and, of course, I'm looking forward to more!
~cu-kid
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January 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I think what's best about this chapter is that you don't have Sarah and Jareth together yet - I mean, they're in the same vicinity, but haven't actually seen each other yet. The anticipation of her seeing him for the first time will definitely keep me reading.
Actually, that's not the only reason I'll keep reading. There was a ton of great things in this. I loved how Jareth is all sweaty and...human in this chapter. Having to go through so much trouble just to get to Sarah was too funny. And him thinking that things aren't fair is hilarious.
But, uh oh! What's Draco doing there? Is he just there to make sure Jareth plays by the rules? I'm eager to find out.
Loved the swift update, too! I'm dying to read more already!
~cu-kid
Actually, that's not the only reason I'll keep reading. There was a ton of great things in this. I loved how Jareth is all sweaty and...human in this chapter. Having to go through so much trouble just to get to Sarah was too funny. And him thinking that things aren't fair is hilarious.
But, uh oh! What's Draco doing there? Is he just there to make sure Jareth plays by the rules? I'm eager to find out.
Loved the swift update, too! I'm dying to read more already!
~cu-kid
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January 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i really like this story so far and cant wait to read the next chapter!
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December 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That was great. No cookie for me. I am a bit flighty at times though...I'm sure if you pointed it out, I would kick myself. What a nice sister you are, writing this lovely story. I loved the card game the Goblins were playing. I am sure that Goblins aren't the only ones that play that game, I have a sneaking suspicion that human males play something similar. I am a bit curious as to what went on with the chicken, and the Goblin hanging from the chandelier, also awesome that he fell asleep up there. LOL. Everything is wonderfully detailed, and funny. I'm sorry I can't offer much more in the way of an intelligent review, but it seems that I get tongue tied...finger tied..*shrugs* whenever I am reading an incredible story. I can't wait to read more. XXOO
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December 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
They'll be more to this, right?
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December 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like this set up. It's a great first chapter, well written. I look forward to more.
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December 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I do hope you post more of this in the near future! I've become re-obsessed (is that even a word?) with Labyrinth fan-fics and am always keeping my eyes peeled for a new take on these characters. I really, really like where this is heading - because I believe I'm correct in thinking that Jareth is Sarah's new co-star, which can lead to so many amusing situations and that oh-so-wonderful hot tension.
Normally, I wait for at least two chapters before reviewing, just so I can get an idea of where a story is going. But I felt compelled to say something because your prose and dialogue are just lovely. Witty, charming, descriptive in an almost cheeky way, which always immediately captures my interest and puts me in awe. My favorite line (among the many in this chapter) was: "it was difficult to come up with something suitably devious when one was attempting to force order down the very throat of chaos." For some reason, that struck me as so brilliant, I think I re-read it three times! I love the fact that you are incorporating the magic Jareth is said to have given Sarah on her trip through the labyrinth - most people mention it, but never really have her do anything with it except use it on him. I think it would be funny if, having gotten so used to her magic working on the people around her, Sarah finds out that it won't work on Jareth (although...the possibility of it working on him and it confusing the hell out of him would be funny, too). Your set up at the beginning with Jareth and Draconus was fantastic. Seeing Jareth try his hardest to deny the two things he loves the most - games and Sarah - was thoroughly amusing.
There were so many amusing and intriguing things in this chapter (like the boyfriend who turned into a cat and puked in her shoes. Hilarious) that I didn't want it to end. I'm looking forward to reading more whenever you have the chance to write/post it!
~cu-kid
Normally, I wait for at least two chapters before reviewing, just so I can get an idea of where a story is going. But I felt compelled to say something because your prose and dialogue are just lovely. Witty, charming, descriptive in an almost cheeky way, which always immediately captures my interest and puts me in awe. My favorite line (among the many in this chapter) was: "it was difficult to come up with something suitably devious when one was attempting to force order down the very throat of chaos." For some reason, that struck me as so brilliant, I think I re-read it three times! I love the fact that you are incorporating the magic Jareth is said to have given Sarah on her trip through the labyrinth - most people mention it, but never really have her do anything with it except use it on him. I think it would be funny if, having gotten so used to her magic working on the people around her, Sarah finds out that it won't work on Jareth (although...the possibility of it working on him and it confusing the hell out of him would be funny, too). Your set up at the beginning with Jareth and Draconus was fantastic. Seeing Jareth try his hardest to deny the two things he loves the most - games and Sarah - was thoroughly amusing.
There were so many amusing and intriguing things in this chapter (like the boyfriend who turned into a cat and puked in her shoes. Hilarious) that I didn't want it to end. I'm looking forward to reading more whenever you have the chance to write/post it!
~cu-kid