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for Love Father, Like Son

by wendi-bnkywuv

person Spamilla
schedule January 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like where this is going, but you might want to revise your paragraphing. It's hard to read massive paragraphs.
schedule January 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, this was written before I had the proper paragraphing skills down.