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for His Rose

by LBK

person christy
schedule March 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
The chemistry between is great. This is my first Friday 13th fic, (well, I've never seen the movies either, but of course I know exactly what it is). I never imagined that something about Jason could be so sweet and funny.

One of my favorite parts was when Rose started running from him, and so, like a friendly dog, he starting chasing after her. Because that's what he does. I was giggling!

Your writing style itself is enjoyable to read. The way you word things--I just like how you put your words together. Like your "good boy-good girl" paragraph. And you put so much information and feeling using such a small amount of words; every sentence delivers something.

And your good with the awwwww factor. That was so tweet when he was touching her cheek!

Even though this has been really cute so far, I get a sense of foreboding. It can't be good for Jason--or Rose--to get so attached to her when she's going to eventually leave. And he's setting up alarms around her house....

Thank you so much.
schedule March 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So....I was kind of wary when I saw what the story about...I thought it would be cheesy and stilted, and cliche, but...it's not. It's really good, I like it. I love the way that you add in his mother's voice, of course, it wouldn't be much of a Friday the 13th story without Mrs. Vorhees. I also liked the way you had him show Rose his name. As a little boy I am sure he could have recognized it, and I can really see him writing it like that for her. I hope this is making sense, I haven't gotten any sleep. I "awwwed" out loud when he went crashing through the forest looking for her, his concern is very endearing. You have a lovely style of writing, very easy to read, you get in all the important information without overwhelming us....the details and descriptions are wonderful. I cannot wait to read more. Hurray for insomnia!! twoot twoot!! LOL

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schedule March 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ohhh i cant wait to see what happens next! great job please update soon!
person capt_davy_jones_gal
schedule March 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i likes, keep going...im a jason fan myself
person freddy's girl
schedule March 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oooohhhh! I love it. KEEP IT UP
schedule March 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
please update soon! I really like this story!
schedule March 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Love the story!! Can't wait for the next chappie!
schedule March 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm not a huge fan of the horror genre, but I'm quite enjoying this! Please write some more, you've a good start here.
schedule March 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
WOW! That was fantastic! Please update again soon.
schedule March 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yay, more Jason stories! ^.^ Looking forward to another chapter~