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mmmmmm....ridges....(: oh sorry got a little lost there. Very excellent story so far. Ritual cannibalism? Are you refering to the ingesting of Yaujta flesh and blood to extend human life? If yes, then go for it. And, if it works, I want some too....LOL. I love how you made Leila steely, a strong mate for a strong hunter. I would like to see him protect her by killing some unknown beastie in Yaujta-in-shining-armor style and then she fucks the shit out of him right there, blowing his mind, then flirtingly says "that's for protecting me" which makes him puff out his chest in true proud Yaujta style....(giggle) -Ginstar3

violent and sexy. I wish it didn't have an end. I really appreciated the voyeurism near the end. Honestly, i cannot think of anything to criticize, aside from some grammatical errors which are, suffice to say, not at the front of my mind.

This chapter was very good and I wouldn't be bothered by a part with the ritual cann. That is what a predator does and who would deny a predator that? I think that this chapter was a good one especially with her getting to check him out. That was really cool.

I love this story and the changes you made were good. Can't wait for another chapter.

It's spelled "entomologist".

This is a great story !!!!!

Please update soon.

Wow. I really really enjoy this story. You have a wonderful writing skill and I really like the characters. I hope you continue because I would love to see what happens if she finds out that he's not human. Also, the military issue could be fun. And sex. More sex. XD You can write a great sex scene. Keep on truckin'.

update soon

Hey now, this totally came out of left field, but I really am liking what I've read here. Formatting aside (hopefully that can be cleaned up), this is very well written and I can see just how much thought and effort you've put into researching things. All the little details like with Bes the beetle in his little Terrarium really make this one stand out. I also love the way you've written Laila as a civillian interacting with military personel and it actually does come out well.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing where you might be taking this. There is definitely a lot of good potential here, but what I've read so far has been quite entertaining indeed. :)

-DGD