rate_review Reviews

Okay, so I generally wait until I've finished a story before I review it, so here I am! I absolutely love your works. I normally get bored with OC stories, the characters usually don't interest me terribly. June, however, (and Jennifer too, but I'll get to her later) actually makes me want to keep reading. I really like her. She and Barricade are a very odd, but very cute couple. The only problem I have with June is not so much a character thing as that in the way she speaks and acts seems to be much younger than how old she's described later on in the story. I read her as being late college/early university age, but then I found out she's actually a professor. Kinda threw me through a loop there. I think the way you've written Transformer!sex is probably the most realistic out of the many, many ideas I've read in other fics. You've clearly put a lot of thought into that aspect of your writing and it's definitely paid off.

So, things I would like to see... I would love it if there was a master link with all the stories as chapters, it's getting a bit annoying piecing together the timeline on my own. You mentioned that you'd written a story about how Jennifer and Starscream meet; I'd love to read it. I think it should be included if you make a listing for this story. I would also love to see a story about how Barricade and June met; partly because I think it would be really interesting and mainly because I cannot get enough of those two.

The only real criticism I have for your stories (because I absolutely LOVE you as a writer!) is that you tend to leave off the pronouns in your dialog. While some people do clip their sentences sometimes when they speak, not everyone talks like Rorschach. It's getting annoying. That one little tidbit aside, you're doing a wonderful job and I hope you never stop writing this story! :)