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May 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
9/10 for this story as a whole(thus far). I wish you had time to update more often though *sniffles*, it would make my day so much better.
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April 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
It seems I have been waiting forever for another chapter from you on this story and you certainly didnt disaapoint me at all! I would have loved more B'raush/Jack time but thats just me! lol
P.S. I want a snowball fight. haha
Update please
P.S. I want a snowball fight. haha
Update please
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April 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter, good to see she finally found out Trunks' name. Hope you update soon, I'm hooked like an addict!
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April 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
SNOWBALL FIGHT !!!!!!!!!!Please, please, please!!!!
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April 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OH NOOOO JACK! lol I love this story so far
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March 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like the whole ensamble you have in the story. I want more!
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March 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
MOAR!!! :D
This is good stuff, keep up the good work! If I was Jack, I'd sabotage the base as I was escaping. The thought that her family is doing nothing about her being used as a lab rat (and the General planning on letting Trunks rape her) sickens me. Ashley seriously needs to grow a pair and pop a cap into the General's forehead! I suppose all the evil stuff just makes the ending seem that much better. Unless you're making this a tragedy, which I hope not! :(
This is good stuff, keep up the good work! If I was Jack, I'd sabotage the base as I was escaping. The thought that her family is doing nothing about her being used as a lab rat (and the General planning on letting Trunks rape her) sickens me. Ashley seriously needs to grow a pair and pop a cap into the General's forehead! I suppose all the evil stuff just makes the ending seem that much better. Unless you're making this a tragedy, which I hope not! :(
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March 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Trunks speaks...how epic is that!!!! why did he rip up all her clothes and then tell her to clean up the room? Was he pissed she invaded his space? Or did she steal his bed? lolz...thanks sooooo much for the cliffie. Aaarggghhh...face palm. I can't wait for him to tell her his real name so Jack can continue calling him Trunks just to spite him *snicker* Keep them chappys comin' can't wait to see what's gonna happen next.
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February 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am glad you did not fall off the face of the earth. For a while it seemed that you did and the death of this story before its completion would have made me sad. Good work and I look forward to future updates.
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January 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am actually very proud of you. It takes guts to go back and start over on something that you worked on, especially if you feel in your heart that it's the right thing to do, even though it was finished and could have been left alone.
I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but I very much agree with your decision. I did feel that the chapter as it was, just felt way way too rushed. It seemed so out of place given how you've spent a great deal of time with the exposition up to this point, to have everything end so suddenly like that. I was waiting for the next chapter before writing another review just to see how you were going to continue things because it felt as though the story was getting off track a little too.
Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing your true chapter 5 and how it will differ from what you had put up before. I do enjoy this story very much and can't wait to read more.
-DGD
I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but I very much agree with your decision. I did feel that the chapter as it was, just felt way way too rushed. It seemed so out of place given how you've spent a great deal of time with the exposition up to this point, to have everything end so suddenly like that. I was waiting for the next chapter before writing another review just to see how you were going to continue things because it felt as though the story was getting off track a little too.
Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing your true chapter 5 and how it will differ from what you had put up before. I do enjoy this story very much and can't wait to read more.
-DGD