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January 21, 2014 at 12:00 AM
kudos to being first story I review since joining this site. I am so hoping for a third chapter.
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July 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm so hooked! What happens? Is this on any other site? will both spocks fight over kirk? Also do you know any stories with just kirk and prime spock get together or or with kirk going back intime to save old planet vulcan? thanks for creating this one of akind story its just... WOW!
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June 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please please please finish this story! I was quite upset to learn this hadn't been updated since 2010. You have a good plot idea, and you should develop it more. This site needs more jems like this. I love how you are taking the fact Spock Prime already had a relationship and is missing Jim in his time line, (who is long dead by that point). Seeing Jim in this time line must have felt like a second chance or rerunion to him. I can see Spock Prime flat out saying to Spock "if you don't pursue him, I will."
Anyways, I'm off topic. You have a good plausible plot line going here, and you should develop it. You could even bring Into Darkness in and develop the story with that. Good luck, hope to see more from you.
Anyways, I'm off topic. You have a good plausible plot line going here, and you should develop it. You could even bring Into Darkness in and develop the story with that. Good luck, hope to see more from you.
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May 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I wish you would finish this story!
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April 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please update this soon!
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October 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Please come back and finish up the story. I just can not wait to see what is going to happen when Prime opens the door to Spock and then sees Jim there. I can just see a fight for Jim is about to take place. I just hope that what ever you have in mind you will come back and finish up the story it is just too good to leave it unfinished.
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November 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey :)
Nice story! I like it very much! The second chapter has a mean ending! XD I hope the third one will come veeeeeeeery soon! I want to know how young Spock is going to react if he sees his Captain with Spock Prime. ;)
Shelly
Nice story! I like it very much! The second chapter has a mean ending! XD I hope the third one will come veeeeeeeery soon! I want to know how young Spock is going to react if he sees his Captain with Spock Prime. ;)
Shelly
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November 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is really good. Totally like all the tension flying around, and the interaction between Spock Prime and Jim is delicious.
That said, it was jarring to have Jim call him Spock Prime out loud. Jim (or others) mentally referring to him as 'Spock Prime' is understandable or even in conversation when referring to both Spocks in order to make a distinction. To actually call Spock that when they're alone though, it felt awkward and impersonal. And I'm guessing that was Spock calling his counterpart that at the end. Why would Spock need to make the distinction? After he wouldn't get confused about who he's referring to.
A thought, I was just so caught up in the story that when Jim called him that it kind of through me and then I couldn't stop thinking about it as I was reading the rest of the chapter. Your story is very good though, I kind of think that's why I couldn't help but bring this up. Awesome work though and I look forward to seeing where things go from here.
That said, it was jarring to have Jim call him Spock Prime out loud. Jim (or others) mentally referring to him as 'Spock Prime' is understandable or even in conversation when referring to both Spocks in order to make a distinction. To actually call Spock that when they're alone though, it felt awkward and impersonal. And I'm guessing that was Spock calling his counterpart that at the end. Why would Spock need to make the distinction? After he wouldn't get confused about who he's referring to.
A thought, I was just so caught up in the story that when Jim called him that it kind of through me and then I couldn't stop thinking about it as I was reading the rest of the chapter. Your story is very good though, I kind of think that's why I couldn't help but bring this up. Awesome work though and I look forward to seeing where things go from here.
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August 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
omg you are so evil! you HAVE to continue this it's an awesome story!!! please continue soon!!
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July 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
*pokes at you* You're still there right? Your going to put up another chapter soon I hope. Really enjoying the story so far and would love to see the rest of this story.