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for Challenging the Balance

by BlueBastard

person DBZchick
schedule March 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Great job! Keep it up! I really want to read more and see what happens to poor Jake, and how their relationship progresses. Neytiri's Ikran is named "Seze", which means "blue flower". http://james-camerons-avatar.wikia.com/wiki/Seze
person Tilenna
schedule March 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OMG! That was ... is hilarious the right word. Because I am loving this story. Laughing my ass off for a good chunk of it, true, but dear lord I adore you right now. It's a new spin on a classic that I usually have no part of, but I love this one! Please please please keep going!
person Sagune
schedule March 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love, love, love this story!
I think you captured both character's emotions nicely. I love how you wrote Jake's shock after the transformation. I laughed!
person Jester
schedule March 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love this story. It flows very nicely from Jake's thoughts to T'su-tey's. It's was very sexy and I love the premise as well. I can't wait to see how you explain the physical change, and I hope Jake gets changed back as well.

-Jester
person madhatter1313
schedule March 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
great solid start to a nice story.... however, Eytukan was the Name of Neytiri's father, and the leader of a clan is the Olo'ektan...it kept throwing me for a loop seeing his name every time and knowing he's dead :)
schedule March 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OMG I love this story! It is very unique and well written!