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July 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
You have a great story going!! Please add a new chapter soon!! :D
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July 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
wow my adrenaline was pumping just as much as Kate's was reading that chapter. awesome, awesome, awesome. can't wait for more.
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July 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like this story. It's well written, and that's rare on these sites. Keep it up-- I can't wait to read more!
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July 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I want more!!! Keep up the great work.
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July 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Holy shit this story is loaded with detail and I'm totally hooked. You managed to put so much detail into this 1 chapter and yet the flow is spot on. Please update soon. Can't wait to read more.
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July 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
hey, good work on the story, looking forward to more
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June 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I hate you. Cause now I have to wait for you to write more. This is way too well written to be on this little 'ol site. I really love how you have taken a pragmatic view on this story. Most of the time when people are writing a predator fiction they "romanticize" (considering the subject matter not the best word) the humans involved. You have made a down to earth girl and very plausible situation for her to be in. My only question is if they are going to capture her now why didn't they the first time? Is that a plot hole or did I just accidently skip that explanation?
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June 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good story nice plot going I hope you continue
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June 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow, it is so great to have you back Nalani! :)
Your writing has been greatly missed, and I daresay that even with your absence, your quality and detail does not appear to have diminished one bit, for there is no greater proof of that then the fact that I'm already hooked on this new story of yours from the get go. Already there are some very interesting characters and situations that are occurring, and I am looking forward to seeing how it is going to develop. As was the case in your previous stories, you are so great with details that it's easy to imagine and visualize what has been written.
Once again, great to have you back. Hope you'll stay! :)
-DGD
Your writing has been greatly missed, and I daresay that even with your absence, your quality and detail does not appear to have diminished one bit, for there is no greater proof of that then the fact that I'm already hooked on this new story of yours from the get go. Already there are some very interesting characters and situations that are occurring, and I am looking forward to seeing how it is going to develop. As was the case in your previous stories, you are so great with details that it's easy to imagine and visualize what has been written.
Once again, great to have you back. Hope you'll stay! :)
-DGD
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June 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am so looking forward to reading more of this story. I really like how this one is shaping up and I can't wait to read more expecially when they get her.