rate_review Reviews

I suppose an advantage to eleven babies would be they could field their own soccer team? This one seemed nicely understated, and well written. I bet it'll make a nice side-scene for fans of your multichapter work too!

Hahah, these two are adorable. You really write good-naturedly innocent very, very well. I haven't watched the movie or even know the characters, but I could definitely get enough from your descriptions to fill in the blanks. And it didn't stop me from enjoying the sweet scene! Very nice use of the cornucopia as a framing device for the story. And really, good all-around writing, too, especially if you said you weren't used to the prompts (I sympathise, this prompt was my first one).

Nicely done, very sweet!

I think you did well! The scene wasn't extremely detailed, but doesn't need to be either. You put in enough details to help the story along and give the reader a picture! I liked it :)

It's a cute little story with some nice sensual details. I don't know the characters but I do have some feel for their looks and their personalities now, at least how they are in private.

From a technical view, a few of the sentences ran on, and when 'Agravaine nodded' was followed with Sophia's response in the same paragraph that was a bit confusing. (It took me a few more sentences to realize that Agravaine was the man's name, not her surname or something like that.) Also, I'm guessing that you meant physically instead of psychically , but with our limited time to respond to the challenges the typos are no big.

Still, the "direction" and many of the little things mentioned made it a sweet story, and her late realization of what the cornucopia resembled was cute.

Cool I am going to have to read more Arthur stories. And man oh man, remind me never to get near THAT cornucopia, 11 babiez oh noez.