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by kheavSarah

person Whitnee
schedule February 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I just started this story today, and I am HOOKED!!! I cant wait for the next chapter!! I am gonna have anxiety checking everyday for an update lol!! looking forward to more!!!!! <3 Whitnee
person Anon
schedule February 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I have been reading this story. I like to give stories a chance. I think the bones of the story are pretty good, the idea is good. But please please get a beta. Things like "spur" rather than "spar" etc. just take a person right out of the story. I am not sure by reading if English is your first language, but if not there are people that will beta that are used to working with those that use English as a second language. I am sure all your readers would be even happier with the story if the wording and spelling were touched up.
schedule February 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
AHHH!!! Connor and Betanu are back! YAY!!! So great to see Betanu make his claim. Ive got a feeling Cross will be the exception to the rule as far as babies go. I cant wait to see what more goes on with Connor and how he'll react to everything, as well as the General. Im really glad Betanu didnt immediately give in to everything he wanted and is making her come to him and admit it to herself that this is what she wants. FANTASTIC JOB!!!!
schedule February 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ooooo..can wait to see who it is? Is it REALLY Connor..or could be a certain someone waiting to claim their mate? Hehe..awesome job
person nera9999
schedule February 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Great story. Please more!!!!
person Amanda
schedule February 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
hi.
love the story a very different concept from what i am used to reading when it comes to fanfiction....i do have a question though..please tell me that little Connor Cross isnt going to hate his mother who raised him or worse not remember her
schedule February 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oh it would be wonderful if it was conner and betanu!
schedule February 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
damn!
loved, again!
person Rev
schedule February 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Aaaahh!!! What?! Oh oh oh oh oh oh Foursome!!!! XD Still dont get why they have to be her pretend mates but I will faithfully follow this story to find out!!
person beliefinkakashi
schedule February 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
LMAO! Lark and Hulk! Brilliant!
Great, now she has two Youtja on her tail. Big B has serious competition! lol! What's Conor's reaction going to be... O.o I'm starting to cackle at her situation, humans of all genders, youtjas, and who knows what else are attracted to her. Thinking back, I'm surprised the Xenomorphs haven't jumped her.
The vulture comment is so true, I like hover over this fic... I almost refused to read anything else...
Nice chap, good to see Kelly and Cross on good terms now! Loved the double smack/rub for PERCY...

Good luck, awaiting the next chapter! *okay... that was a bit korny... "awaiting" lol! too lazy to change it though, so your stuck with it. XD *