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January 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story please keep going!!!
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December 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon Im captivated by your story!
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December 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is an epic and enthralling tale. I can't wait to see where else you'll take this story and I'm eagerly awaiting MORE!!!!!
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November 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy to see an update ^_^ I loved the chapters, hate the wait lol. please update asap I can't wait to see what's next
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September 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is such an amazing story!!! Keep up the great work ^.^
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September 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
awesome ... I cant wait for more!!!
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August 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
953 Rolls-Royce Silver Dawn Drophead Convertible... while an epically awesome car... doesnt have a back seat
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August 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Please post more! Your writing is amazing. When I'm reading this I feel like it's really the second part of the movie. I can't wait for more.
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July 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I started this story a few hours ago and it sucked me right in. You really know how to weave an atmosphere for the reader that becomes rather addictive.
HOWEVER, you lost me at the chapter in which the festival took place. I know the fun of fan fiction is to write the characters in any manner the author chooses but in my humble opinion, a truly good fan fiction makes you feel like you are still within the same universe the original story/movie created. I’m all for growing up the story for adult readers but there is a difference between maturing the story for a more adult audience and completely losing the feel of the original story altogether. Not all fan fiction writers or readers may agree with me, but hey like I said; its just my opinion.
Shattered, while very provocative and enjoyable to read in parts, didn't really portray the world Jim Henson created in the movie. This confused me because you mentioned this story being an homage to Mr. Henson in your author's note. This story didn't at all have the feel of Jim Henson's original vision.
For example, the goblins which Jareth is the king of, and are constantly around him in the movie, are hardly mentioned in this story at all. Instead, Shattered mostly talks of him ruling over normal people in a sort of midevil like kingdom that is hardly recognizable as the Labyrinth world of the movie. The whimsy and enchantment that are shown in the film is only briefly touched on in the beginning of Shattered, then it goes in a very different direction; one that seems nearly devoid of whimsy and enchantment altogether as the story goes on.
Not to put too much of a fine point on it, but I personally think your portrayal of Sarah to be way off base. In the beginning she comes off as far too bookish, almost like a pseudo-intellectual that over thinks everything. Yes, two years were supposed to have passed but I don't see that character going that far off her original personality, even with the passing of time.
Also, The part where Jareth brakes her spirit makes Sarah come off as just plain pathetic and more than a bit annoying. Seeing such a strong heroine being portrayed as nothing but a compliant little sex doll just doesn't jive with the character I grew up admiring. While I did admire and enjoy your general idea of the darker side of the labyrinth, it was just too much in my opinion.
I will say that I did highly enjoy most of what I read up until the chapter that you lost me. You are a very talented writer and just because I didn’t enjoy all of Shattered doesn’t mean others won’t.
HOWEVER, you lost me at the chapter in which the festival took place. I know the fun of fan fiction is to write the characters in any manner the author chooses but in my humble opinion, a truly good fan fiction makes you feel like you are still within the same universe the original story/movie created. I’m all for growing up the story for adult readers but there is a difference between maturing the story for a more adult audience and completely losing the feel of the original story altogether. Not all fan fiction writers or readers may agree with me, but hey like I said; its just my opinion.
Shattered, while very provocative and enjoyable to read in parts, didn't really portray the world Jim Henson created in the movie. This confused me because you mentioned this story being an homage to Mr. Henson in your author's note. This story didn't at all have the feel of Jim Henson's original vision.
For example, the goblins which Jareth is the king of, and are constantly around him in the movie, are hardly mentioned in this story at all. Instead, Shattered mostly talks of him ruling over normal people in a sort of midevil like kingdom that is hardly recognizable as the Labyrinth world of the movie. The whimsy and enchantment that are shown in the film is only briefly touched on in the beginning of Shattered, then it goes in a very different direction; one that seems nearly devoid of whimsy and enchantment altogether as the story goes on.
Not to put too much of a fine point on it, but I personally think your portrayal of Sarah to be way off base. In the beginning she comes off as far too bookish, almost like a pseudo-intellectual that over thinks everything. Yes, two years were supposed to have passed but I don't see that character going that far off her original personality, even with the passing of time.
Also, The part where Jareth brakes her spirit makes Sarah come off as just plain pathetic and more than a bit annoying. Seeing such a strong heroine being portrayed as nothing but a compliant little sex doll just doesn't jive with the character I grew up admiring. While I did admire and enjoy your general idea of the darker side of the labyrinth, it was just too much in my opinion.
I will say that I did highly enjoy most of what I read up until the chapter that you lost me. You are a very talented writer and just because I didn’t enjoy all of Shattered doesn’t mean others won’t.
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July 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
By far one of the BEST Labyrinth fanfics EVER.