rate_review Reviews

tis fandom is a little weird becuase you have Padme and Jacen togther.This would technally be incest because Jacen is Padme's grandson and the fact that the time frames are completey out of place .

ok, the name of the disease sucks, and who the hell is this Jacen or whatever dude? i mean you should give him a backround, what he has to do with Padme and etc. ok sorry i'm a wee bit stressed out, i have sunburn and i'm really grouchy...... but ok Jacen the OC is ok... but the name of disease still sucks.... come on! : )
you can be more creative than that!! :D :D

Hmm. It's not terribly bad but it's really not very good, either. You have a lot of good elements but there's just something lacking in a major way. It doesn't flow, it has no -- I don't know what. It's not detailed and the people in it don't seem real. It's good try though and I'm sure you will improve with practice.

It's definly different and good sex scene! ^.^ Lucky padme... hehehehe