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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Leaves a bit to the imagination, eh? Always a good thing ^_^
Excellent all around. (I like to repeat myself constantly, apparently.)
Always a joy when you update! ^_^V
Excellent all around. (I like to repeat myself constantly, apparently.)
Always a joy when you update! ^_^V
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter. I think the slave ship idea is good. I like it.
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Well then, I guess Jacks lesson worked rather well then. Yay for Jack and his excellent teaching skills! Oh, and about the slave ship plot idea, I would definatly read it if you wrote it. Definatly.
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
hmmm... use my imagination i've got a pretty good imagination...*drool begins to shortout keyboard* hmm why that's a fine idea. great story can't wait for more!
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I love you're plot. (Though I can't see where it'll go after they've met up, but somethin's gotta happen.) I love the parrot, his singing, really. The best way for Will to get over it is to just join in. Afterall, it's been declared that Will has a lovely singing voice.
I like your portrayal of Elizabeth. I kept hoping she bites it in the movie so Will and Jack could run off together and have pirate adventures, but this is good too. ^_^ I like her slapping Bootstrap. In fact, I like her in your story in general. She got a backbone, and isn't afraid to use it when necessary.
I love the way your Jack thinks. I love how he was seduced by memories of Bootstrap and Will's own 'stupidity'. The only thing I'd change is his speech. It needs ta be more piratey, mate. Ne'er have I heard Jack use such proper English. Ye need ta tweek it jus' a bit, luv. But other than that, yer Jack's a riot. His revenge is perfect on Ana. I say, 'poor will', but I think he'll enjoy himself.
Speaking of Will. Sometimes I think he's a bit... fluffly, for a man and blacksmith, but it goes so nicely against Jack I'd have a hard time thinking of a way to change his demeanor without affecting the development of their relationship. Thus I forgive the slightly submissive/girly Will. And how dare you stab him! Nearly gave me a heart-attack at the thought of you killing him off. One would think that a swordsman of his caliber would keep his weapon out until all the captives are under lock and key. A thrown dagger embedding itself in the stomache do't m't make for an easy recovery, if at all. Puncture the intestines and you're done for. *sniffel* Does this have a happy ending? Or is this going to be realistic and they all get hanged?
Moving right along, love the crew, can't believe Will gave Jack that list. Don't wanna know how he got it. Wow at the slight mutiny pending with the crew. We aren't going through that again, are we? Even Bootstrap said the reward money wasn't enough. But maybe Jack'll sail on the Pacific? That's a different ocean entirely, with lots of other cultures and treasure to be found...?
Anywho, Scribo Celeritis! Well, ye write fast enough, just... more chapters, please? And a wedding? I love weddings, drinks all around!
This review has been long enough, must go to work. Later~!
I like your portrayal of Elizabeth. I kept hoping she bites it in the movie so Will and Jack could run off together and have pirate adventures, but this is good too. ^_^ I like her slapping Bootstrap. In fact, I like her in your story in general. She got a backbone, and isn't afraid to use it when necessary.
I love the way your Jack thinks. I love how he was seduced by memories of Bootstrap and Will's own 'stupidity'. The only thing I'd change is his speech. It needs ta be more piratey, mate. Ne'er have I heard Jack use such proper English. Ye need ta tweek it jus' a bit, luv. But other than that, yer Jack's a riot. His revenge is perfect on Ana. I say, 'poor will', but I think he'll enjoy himself.
Speaking of Will. Sometimes I think he's a bit... fluffly, for a man and blacksmith, but it goes so nicely against Jack I'd have a hard time thinking of a way to change his demeanor without affecting the development of their relationship. Thus I forgive the slightly submissive/girly Will. And how dare you stab him! Nearly gave me a heart-attack at the thought of you killing him off. One would think that a swordsman of his caliber would keep his weapon out until all the captives are under lock and key. A thrown dagger embedding itself in the stomache do't m't make for an easy recovery, if at all. Puncture the intestines and you're done for. *sniffel* Does this have a happy ending? Or is this going to be realistic and they all get hanged?
Moving right along, love the crew, can't believe Will gave Jack that list. Don't wanna know how he got it. Wow at the slight mutiny pending with the crew. We aren't going through that again, are we? Even Bootstrap said the reward money wasn't enough. But maybe Jack'll sail on the Pacific? That's a different ocean entirely, with lots of other cultures and treasure to be found...?
Anywho, Scribo Celeritis! Well, ye write fast enough, just... more chapters, please? And a wedding? I love weddings, drinks all around!
This review has been long enough, must go to work. Later~!
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Evil evil writer! -sucks lolli-
You...you...I can't believe you did that to Anamaria! Wait, yes I can. it's Captain Jack Sparrow. Hee hee, you brilliant thinker. He got Anamaria the ultimate revenge, I just can't wait to see what she'll do it retaliation, heh he...
I think I pity Jack now.
Will, on the other hand, was moire like....'rewarded' for his 'misdeeds' with 'punishment'. hey, I just like doing 'this'.
Now, if you don't mind me, I have to go make a mental picture of our favorite boys while hoping Cotton doesn't find a dead parrot in his bunk tommorrow
You...you...I can't believe you did that to Anamaria! Wait, yes I can. it's Captain Jack Sparrow. Hee hee, you brilliant thinker. He got Anamaria the ultimate revenge, I just can't wait to see what she'll do it retaliation, heh he...
I think I pity Jack now.
Will, on the other hand, was moire like....'rewarded' for his 'misdeeds' with 'punishment'. hey, I just like doing 'this'.
Now, if you don't mind me, I have to go make a mental picture of our favorite boys while hoping Cotton doesn't find a dead parrot in his bunk tommorrow
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ooh, how evil! You were right, I like very much. But how is that supposed to teach Will the lesson Jack wants? If I were Will that would teach me to do that again and again and again......
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
For the fourth time you saw it??? I'm so jealous. I got all dressed and what not to go see it again, but my mom wouldn't drive me. 'It's not safe to go see a movie alone'. HA! Makes me regret deciding to wait to get my drivers license... (waiting until I'm 18, which is in about a month) So today I'm a very pissed off gal, and you've made the day a lil'more cheery with this fic. Thank you! Can't wait to hear Will's tale of getting free of the Interceptor. Seeing how I've only seen the movie once, I can't remember how he did it in the movie. Grr... ANYWAYS! Also, that AU that your talking about sound /super/ good. I really hope you decide to write about it, cause I would soooo read it! Looking forward to more of your fic, keep up the FABULOUS work!!
Obsessed about seeing the movie again,
Sandrine
Obsessed about seeing the movie again,
Sandrine
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ooo, kinky there at the end. ^_^ Nice punishment by the way! I thought it was pretty funny myself. Poor annamarie (prob. spelt wrong!), having to deal with the parrot. I wonder if either one is gunna make it out the night alive? Hehehe... Looking foward to more of your fabulous work!
Sandrine
Sandrine
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July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Interesting way for Jack and Will Turner Sr. to meet! ^_^ Good job with that.
And I like how you write Will... he's playful. ^_^
Great!
And I like how you write Will... he's playful. ^_^
Great!