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August 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Heh...loved Jack's convo with himself; very amusing ^__^ post more soon please, i'm lovin this!!!!
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August 14, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Your bastardization of Norrington's character makes baby Jesus cry, it is that off. You could EASILY make a new character to play the bad guy, and it would make SO much more sense. Obviously you have some misconception about his character, and it boggles my mind. You seem to have Jack down pretty good - were you asleep during the parts of the movie that didn't deal directly with him?
Perhaps reading this would help you: http://www.wordplayer.com/forums/movies/index.cgi?read=52639
-Claire Rose
Perhaps reading this would help you: http://www.wordplayer.com/forums/movies/index.cgi?read=52639
-Claire Rose
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August 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I am totally loving this. Keep it comin. Update sooner ok? ok
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August 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You're doing a great job of portraying Jack's character. Super. I love how in the movie he appears to be a drunken fool at times, yet he has all of these ingenius plans worked out that save the day.
As far as I'm concerned no apology or explanation was necessary for explaining the passages in which Jack is thinking to himself. I thought it was perfectly clear what was happening. And I love the way he seems to be arguing with himself, showing two sides to himself.
My only disappointment (sort of) in this chappie is that Jack seems to have fully recovered. What happened to the burning in his chest? In the next chapter he will collapse in agony when searing pain rips through his chest, right? Right? Pwease torture the hero?
As far as I'm concerned no apology or explanation was necessary for explaining the passages in which Jack is thinking to himself. I thought it was perfectly clear what was happening. And I love the way he seems to be arguing with himself, showing two sides to himself.
My only disappointment (sort of) in this chappie is that Jack seems to have fully recovered. What happened to the burning in his chest? In the next chapter he will collapse in agony when searing pain rips through his chest, right? Right? Pwease torture the hero?
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August 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
1: Humor intended, approval warmly received.
2: ::throws admiration back at'cha:: Wonderful, wonderful chapter, as always. As always, as always, as always. And even better the fifth time around ;)
3. I wonder who will wind up with legs akimbo first, Abiageal or Aveline? Will be interestin' to see who's more easily seduced of the two... I still have an entire stable of emotional trauma to muck before I can even think about allowing that girl to spread her legs.
4.avo avo again, as always, as always ;) My favorite part:
"Aye, tis been many a season since ye’ve rightly gutted an opponent, and there’s no way in hell ye’ve got it in you to drain the life of Norrington’s girl. Ye can think about it though.
I can think about it, I have thought about it. I’ve planned every last detail, but when I saw her at my execution ceremony, all the plans went out the window. She’d obviously felt mercy for me, and any person willin’ to give sne lne like me the benefit of the doubt deserves ta keep breathin’."
Ahh, the honesty of it all. Raw and wonderful. And morbid thoughts, to boot. A girl after my own heart, you are.
Best,
Quinn
2: ::throws admiration back at'cha:: Wonderful, wonderful chapter, as always. As always, as always, as always. And even better the fifth time around ;)
3. I wonder who will wind up with legs akimbo first, Abiageal or Aveline? Will be interestin' to see who's more easily seduced of the two... I still have an entire stable of emotional trauma to muck before I can even think about allowing that girl to spread her legs.
4.avo avo again, as always, as always ;) My favorite part:
"Aye, tis been many a season since ye’ve rightly gutted an opponent, and there’s no way in hell ye’ve got it in you to drain the life of Norrington’s girl. Ye can think about it though.
I can think about it, I have thought about it. I’ve planned every last detail, but when I saw her at my execution ceremony, all the plans went out the window. She’d obviously felt mercy for me, and any person willin’ to give sne lne like me the benefit of the doubt deserves ta keep breathin’."
Ahh, the honesty of it all. Raw and wonderful. And morbid thoughts, to boot. A girl after my own heart, you are.
Best,
Quinn
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August 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Lovely new chap, Nimue. I think I've told you so on ff.net, but this is a lovely story. Your OC is charmingly fresh among a horde of Mary Sues that are popping up in this fandom. Keep the good stuff coming, and don't be afraid of Jack. I can sense that he's becoming harder to write, but you're right on the money so far. Don't compromise him for anything!
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August 8, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Bravo, well done as always. Love this chapter; like I said, it's rivaled only by Jack's prison scenes in my mind. You've also managed to do something... I don't know what exactly it is, just something *different*... with Will & Elizabeth that has allowed me to actually stake a little concern in their happiness and well-being, whereas I generally find them/their relationship a bit colorless. Elizabeth is a bit too perfect, in a way... Maybe it's the fact that your third person omniscient has revealed imperfections and concerns that I don't think ae ime imagines her capable of, that enables me to see her as more of a person and less of a trophy. Hooray for you :)
Best,
Quinn
Best,
Quinn
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August 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Oh, now I'm intrigued! Whatever is Jack up to? Please update soon!
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July 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
OoOoOh, I see what you've done now. Nice new chapters! I love this story, Nimue. Keep going! You write Sparrow so well, it's like I'm watching it on the screen! ;)
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July 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Oooo! It's gettin' good! Thanks for torturing Jack. Please make his recovery excruciatingly slow and painful. I love it when the heroes get hurt, little sickie that I am! Hee hee