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March 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I thought that was awasome so sweet so what i was looking for. I loved itnEVER SAY IT SUCKED AGAIN that was cool
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February 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I`m wiping my tears now. So sad, but wit a happy end. It`s brilliant, just brilliant.
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January 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this didn't suck. it is perfect to start a little series of stories. keep going with this story i got a feeling that it is going to be a winner.
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October 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
simply lovely and very sweet. iloved it!
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July 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
It didn't totally suck! You're too hard on yourself!
The idea is GREAT, and it has a great plot. There are VERY few errors that I noticed, and the only other thing that 'sucked', was that Will was OOC. I mean (and I say this in the kindest waom oom one author to another) Will may be broken, but he's like a school girl, having problems with raging hormones. *giggles* Like PMS or a pregnant woman. *pictures the image and bursts out laughing*
Yes, it would be good for Will to be broken and angsty, but have him still hide his emotions from Jack. He doesn't know that he's found the bottle. He doesn't want to scare his true love away.
The scene of him in the ocean was LOVELY, as are some of the other images. I can sill ill crying silently, but I can't really see him sobbing (unless he's completely pissed drunk). I see him as the type to wipe away his tears and pretend he wasn't caught crying (unless Jack beats some sense into him ^__^)
Like I said, a GREAT story so far, there are just a FEW adjustments you need. I wouldn't mind reading it again. obabobably will, if no one else updates their PotC fics soon.
I DO hope to see more from you soon, and I hope I helped you (and didn't scare you away)
Hugs and Love^_~GN
The idea is GREAT, and it has a great plot. There are VERY few errors that I noticed, and the only other thing that 'sucked', was that Will was OOC. I mean (and I say this in the kindest waom oom one author to another) Will may be broken, but he's like a school girl, having problems with raging hormones. *giggles* Like PMS or a pregnant woman. *pictures the image and bursts out laughing*
Yes, it would be good for Will to be broken and angsty, but have him still hide his emotions from Jack. He doesn't know that he's found the bottle. He doesn't want to scare his true love away.
The scene of him in the ocean was LOVELY, as are some of the other images. I can sill ill crying silently, but I can't really see him sobbing (unless he's completely pissed drunk). I see him as the type to wipe away his tears and pretend he wasn't caught crying (unless Jack beats some sense into him ^__^)
Like I said, a GREAT story so far, there are just a FEW adjustments you need. I wouldn't mind reading it again. obabobably will, if no one else updates their PotC fics soon.
I DO hope to see more from you soon, and I hope I helped you (and didn't scare you away)
Hugs and Love^_~GN
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July 21, 2003 at 12:00 AM
It didn't suck! All these Jack/Will Fictions mostly have sex in them. It's really nice to read a Jack/Will fic that's not about sex!
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July 21, 2003 at 12:00 AM
If you want to unsuck this then hear is what you do, you right another chapter. And just between you and me, it didn't suck that much. Its nice to read a good sappy romance once in a wial.
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July 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This was so good it made me cry. I hope there's a sequel.
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July 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I have one thing to say to you.
LIAR~!
That was a suberb piece of fanfiction, a bit soap opera ish, try to tone it down slightly and explain a bit more in your fic. DOn't count yourself down.
It was a lovely beginging, if you don't keep writing I'll cull you.
Until the next review....
Nita!
LIAR~!
That was a suberb piece of fanfiction, a bit soap opera ish, try to tone it down slightly and explain a bit more in your fic. DOn't count yourself down.
It was a lovely beginging, if you don't keep writing I'll cull you.
Until the next review....
Nita!
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July 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Great story I loved it!