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for Breathe

by elfchic02

person Sparx
schedule August 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Jack went to save him! I know it! I know he did!!! Or at least I hope he did lol. Sigh. Poor Will. Continue soon!
person Melanie
schedule August 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This story is very interesting. I like it alot. :) Will Barbossa get to Will? I am anxious to find out what will happen to the lad. ;) Do keep going... can't wait to read more of this tale. Thanks for sharing!
person Cait
schedule August 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I was goin tel tell you what a great story you wrote until I read that last comment. I love Will Turner and I will hate and loathe you forever if you do any harm to him! That is just my "obsession over orlando bloom talk" but really dont hurt him.lol Anyhoo upgrade soon, I really want to know what happens.
person ShinigamiGirl
schedule August 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Will better not drown! Hurry up and update! Can't wait till you do!
person Karasu
schedule August 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You're doing well so far and I'm interested to see where you're heading with this to change the movie's course. I would like to point out somng tng that bothers me a lot while reading - you're changing tenses. ;;^^ Please look over you next chapters to make sure everything's in past tense? It's very distracting having the verbs suddenly become present tense.
person Raven
schedule August 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ooh! Very thrilling! Impressed that most lines are word for word, and I am curious as to what is going to happen to Will.........I may sound a bit sadistic but......You can hurt him as much as you want......but please, no missing limbs or anything that drastic. *snicker* Good, though...so keep going.
person Sarah
schedule August 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Empty threat chicky! (I hope!) As there's little to be shrapnel on the Interceptor and though gunpower makes a big boom and fire, there's nothing there to pierce the. E. E. Excellent start, hope to see more of this quickly!
person angelbird
schedule August 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
good start to what looks like a great story. please continue soon.