rate_review Reviews

I dont know if you will ever see this cause the story hasnt been updated in like two and a half years, but i just had to leave a comment anyways because this story was so good! I loved the whole thing. I could not tear my eyes away from the screen and i read the whole thing from start to finish without stopping! you are such talanted writer. i loved will's "snarkiness" it was so great.

THIS IS AMAZING!!!!!!

That was the greatest! I love Will as this kinda personality...Very well-written- lovely! Keep going...

Is this story discontinued? Because I see you haven't updated in a while...but it's so good that you have to update!

When will it be updated??? I have been waiting for it for year!!!
Please!!!! *begging*

I hope this fic will still get an update. It's definitely one of the best. It's a shame to just live it hanging. A shame indeed.

Damn this story is good. I just found it today, and I'm very impressed. I love the depth of your characters, and i love the way it's not the usual hurt/comfort stuff. Nice job and please please update.

THis story is so good that you *have* to update it soon!

I must say, I never review fanfics as a rule, but I just had to say that I *love* this story. You really capture Will's emotional state, I'm very impressed. Can't wait to see what you come up with next!

Shame on me for lurking for so long! *holds out hand, and Jack slaps the back of it with a ruler* Er...right.

Anyways, I was just going through the lists, reading and rereading some stories, trying to figure out why I love Jack/Will so much, realizing that it's unavoidable, and just doing it anyways. ^__^

SO! I decided to review you to motivate you! After all, we all loveses the pirate action! *innocent grin* Oh, and I don't know about the Seraph, but I'VE been lazy in writing. Shame on me! *both Elven and Jack share a look before he tosses the ruler and walks out muttering* *shrugs* Meh...*rolls eyes*

Okay! The parts I loved the best!

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// I think he means me. You know, when you called me a “conniving little bastard”. I still haven’t heard an apology, you know.

And you never will. //

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// “Does it tell you to do things?”

What is this, an interrogation? I wanted a conversation, not an assault.

“Yes. I mainly ignore them. It is an annoying little thing. Doesn’t do a damn thing I tell it.” Apparently, I felt inclined to answer every one of his questions.

It? I’m not that bad.

What would you prefer to be called? You don’t sound like anything so I can’t call you ‘him’ or ‘her’. //

(Elven: LMAO when he just sprung the question back on it/him/her/thingy!!!)

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// “Will, what do you think you are doing?” Shush, you will ruin it.

“I thought you wanted me to go to sleep.”

“Yes. In your bed.” Don’t you dare try to shove me onto the floor.

“Jack,” I murmured into the small space between us, “I’m not going anywhere.” //

(Elven: Shove him to the floor! Just the idea amusamusing! And if he had said "Shush, you will ruin it" out loud, I would have LOVED the expression on Jack's face!)


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// If I can’t get what I want by being relatively direct, I’ll work towards it. I want Jack in my bed. If I can’t have that, I’ll just have to go to his. There had better be some damn good fucking soon, or I’m going to have to find someone else. //

(Elven: NO finding anyone else, Will! *points finger threateningly* Besides, you know that you want Jack, and it shouldn't take much to seduce him...I mean, he can USUALLY take a hint, but...*shrugs*)

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// I woke up to the feeling that someone was staring at me. Keeping my eyes closed, I assessed my surroundings, and realized were I had ended up the night before. I could feel Jack’s breath on my face but before I could comment, he began to speak.

“An angel. You look like an angel when you are asleep.” Jack was whispering, apparently not knowing that I had already awoken.

Opening my eyes, I startled him. He moved away from me slightly, breaking the closeness.

“And when I’m awake? A fallen angel maybe?” Jack looked pained at the question.

“You are not a fallen angel.”

“Fallen angels have descended from heaven, leaving behind their loving tor.tor.” I tried to explain to him why I felt that I had fallen.

“Yes, but why?”

“Well… because all angels are given a choice. But once they descend from heaven, they can not go back.”

Jack looked into my eyes, pleading with out words.

“They had free will, they weren’t forced like you. You didn’t want this. You didn’t fall, Will. You were pushed. It’s not the same.”

“But I can’t go back.”

“You can if you want to.” He leaned towards me, placing his lips on my forehead.

It feels so good. The tugging is strong and I can’t move. So I’ll just stay like this until he gets tired of it.

Damn it. There isn’t going to be any morning sex, is there? //


(Elven: Okay, the dialogue in this scens ams amazing. It was an intense moment, just with the words spoken, and with the emotions conveyed when you wrote out how Will was feeling. KUDOS AND COOKIES!!!! *hands cookies*)

Elven: Please! PLEASE! Update soon!!!! I want to see some more! Don't give up on this story! *hands more cookies as bribes*

Will: *sighs*JackJack: O__o???

Elven: *thinks* *hands rum as bribe too*

Jack: *follows rum*

Elven: -__-;;;;;;;